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Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. Do you agree?



HoaiThuongNguyen 1 / -  
Sep 3, 2020   #1

the effect of Television on cultural development



In the era of advanced technology, television is more and more ubiquitous and is owned by most families all over the world. Thus, it is believed that apart from being an important source of valuable information and news, television has considerably contributed to the changes and formation of a variety of cultures. Personally, I suppose that television has both positive and negative impacts on cultural development.

On the one hand, it can not be denied that television plays a significant role in maintaining and developing cultural values in many societies. Firstly, by launching documentary films, historical programs, and others related to cultural identities, television helps young generations access to their traditional values in their nations. For instance, people will pay respects to their ancients and brave heroes who sacrificed for peace when they watch historical films which mention wars in the past. In addition, daily news channels which talk about good examples of kindness and honesty everywhere also contribute to educating people about moral lessons which our ancients had taught. Gradually, such lessons play a key role in creating a developed society with talented and gentle citizens.

On the other hand, there are some detrimental aspects of television that should not be ignored. First of all, the fact that people can access to various cultures in the world thanks to television results in the problem that they will follow such cultures and forget their original ones which are heritages of each nation. For example, with the dominance of Hollywood films around the globe, some Eastern countries are facing the risk of losing their national identities. Indeed, in Vietnam, most young people pursue the western lifestyle and even forget traditional principles which are transmitted through thousands of years. Secondly, although most programs published on TV are controlled strictly, there are still some illegal channels that publish improper information or some films having too much sexual and violent content. Such programs have a considerably negative impact on the moral development of viewers, especially children who are likely to imitate what they saw. Moreover, some films which exaggerate the story unintentionally make people misunderstand about images of certain countries. For example, people may think Malaysia is dangerous with mafia and drugs through action films about this country.

In conclusion, everything has pros and cons and television is no exception. While it can contribute to the development of cultures, in some aspects, it may be harmful if the people do not know how to avoid its downsides.

NguyenPhuoc 5 / 8  
Sep 4, 2020   #2
To begin with, I suggest you should try to maintain the number of words between 250 and 300. This essay is way too long and i don't think you can finish the test on time with such long essay. Instead, try to invest more lexical resource and grammar diversity. Secondly, in agree/disagree essay, you should pick a side to defend instead of saying that you agree and disagree at the same time. If you have ideas to support both sides, try to support only one side and use the opposite ideas to write a concession paragraph (which can help enhance your score). Finally, The topic asks you if you agree with the idea "TV has had influence on the cultures" or not. It doesn't ask you about either bad or good influence TV has on cultures. So i think you misunderstood the request of the topic
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15461  
Sep 4, 2020   #3
I realize that you were aiming for a higher C&C score by over explaining your paragraph presentations. However, the over explanations did not help your essay because you lost track of the clarity of the paragraph just the same. You are using too many reasons in your presentation. Each paragraph should have only a single topic sentence, with 4 sentences explaining the topic sentence within the paragraph. You do not need 2 topics per paragraph. The 4 paragraph presentations work best with a single topic sentence per paragraph.

You have word choice errors in your essay such as "can not", which should be cannot meaning "unable to". "Can not" is a confusing word because it mean "Can, but unable to." You also have some word usage errors that affected the clarity of your sentences. When you said "In some aspects", what you really wanted to say was "In some respects".

In a task 2 essay, regardless of the discussion type, never use words that appear to portray you as not having a clear opinion . In addition to that, you have to improve your vocabulary skills. Try to develop more academic vocabulary as opposed to everyday overused expressions in your essays.


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