Television teaches violence - my paragraph about television.

Television is harmful to children because it teaches them violence as a way of solving problems. Nowadays, there are many brutal movies on television contain violent scenes such as shooting scenes, or a bunch of fighting scenes. Actually, This sort of movie affects negatively to most children. For instance, Children always tend to act out what they recognized from television with friends at school and also with their parents at home. Moreover, Children's TV shows use a lot of bloody acts as real examples. Although children are very excited at these programs, they don't know that it leads their behaviors into aggressive. For example, when children have an argument with other people, they unconsciously deal with these problems by fighting instead of using the word. In short, With the booming of television programs, it should be an alarm since television is really harmful to children as it teaches them violence as a way of tackling problems.

i think that brutal and violent have the same meaning.


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Television is harmful to children because it teaches them violence as a way of solving problems as it makes them violent. Nowadays, there are many brutal movies on television contain violent scenes such as shooting scenes, or a bunch of fighting scenes showing shooting, murder, bombings etc that can be deemed as brutal. Actually, This sort of movie affects negatively to most children . For instance,It is normally seen that children always tend try to act out what they recognizedfrom television with friends at school and also with their parents at home see on television. Moreover, Children's TV shows use a lot of bloody acts as real examples Nowadays even kids program shows have a lot of violent content in them. Although children are very excited at these programs, they don't know that it leads their behaviors into aggressive children find these programs quite exciting but they are unware of their ill effects. For example, when children have an argument with other people, they unconsciously deal with these problems by fighting instead of using the word children instead of acting calmly in various situation show anger . In short, With the booming of television programs, it should be an alarm since television is really harmful to children as it teaches them violence as a way of tackling problems. We all must put the television to a wise use while knowing its vices.

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