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IELTS Task 1 : Temperature and Rainfall in Darwin and Kuala Lumpur (two tables)


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 25, 2014   #1
The tables compare the data on the rate of temperature and precipitation over a calendar year in two different countries.

Clearly, there are a four-month from May to August showing similar temperatures. Likewise, May records an identic number of rainy days in Darwin and Kuala Lumpur.

As per the tables, Darwin covers with moderate temperature recording the average at 32oC in January, February and August, a similar temperature occurring in Kuala Lumpur weather from July to December. However, the highest rate of temperature in Darwin breaks the hottest degree in Kuala Lumpur. In October and November, Darwin records 34oC while the hottest period in Kuala Lumpur occurs between February and June with a point lower than Darwin has.

On the hand of rainfall, Darwin's precipitation rates throughout the year experiences more volatile fluctuation than the number of rain in Kuala Lumpur. Coming with the wettest month with 20 days rainy in the early year, it drops to no rain at all in July and August. Kuala Lumpur has a similar amount number of rain with Darwin in October and November, yet both of countries identify a similar number of rain in March.





vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 25, 2014   #2
Shanafi, I hope my suggestions work for you :-)

Clearly, there are a four-month from May to August showing similar temperatures. Likewise, May records an identic number of rainy days in Darwin and Kuala Lumpur.

- ... there are four- months from ... May records show and identical number...

As per the tables, Darwin covers with moderate temperature recording the average at 32oC in January, February and August, a similar temperature occurring in Kuala Lumpur weather from July to December. However, the highest rate of temperature in Darwin breaks the hottest degree in Kuala Lumpur. In October and November, Darwin records 34oC while the hottest period in Kuala Lumpur occurs between February and June with a point lower than Darwin has.

- The tables indicate that Darwin recorded moderate temperatures ranging from 32oC in ... with similar temperatures... November, Darwin recorded .. while the hottest period in Kuala Lumpur occurred between...

On the hand of rainfall, Darwin's precipitation rates throughout the year experiences more volatile fluctuation than the number of rain in Kuala Lumpur. Coming with the wettest month with 20 days rainy in the early year, it drops to no rain at all in July and August . Kuala Lumpur has a similar amount number of rain with Darwin in October and November, yet both of countries identify a similar number of rain in March.

- Rainfall in Darwin showed... rates throughout the year were more volatile in fluctuation than in Kuala... The wet months occurred for 20 days early in the year, with no rainfall in July and August.... number of rainfall with Darwin in October and November , identifying a similar amount of rainfall in March as well .
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 25, 2014   #3
Hi, Louisa. Well actually your comments are very valuable. However, may I ask something that make me confuse.

The tables indicate that Darwin recorded moderate temperatures ranging

while the hottest period in Kuala Lumpur occurred

by those suggestions why the verb should be written in simple past as the prompt did not clearly refferred the past year ?
Based on my understanding, we can use simple past when the past year clearly written in the prompt. Would you kindly give me a simple understanding about this. Thank you Louisa :)
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 25, 2014   #4
I appreciate your kind words SHanafi. I understand that the rules of the English language can also be confusing because of the seemingly strict intricacies of the rules. In reality though, the rules are not that strict and you will find that you can relax those rules in certain instances. The rules are only hard and unchangeable as you study grammar as an English student. Once you reach near native speaker level, the rules will begin to relax due to the more advanced language rules that will then include exceptions.

Based on my understanding, we can use simple past when the past year clearly written in the prompt. Would you kindly give me a simple understanding about this. Thank you Louisa :)

- Shanafi, by the way you wrote the essay and the fact that October and November have not occurred for us this year yet, it was quite obvious that you were referring to the chart of the past year. That is why I used the simple past tense to revise the sentence for you. In situations where the past is implied, it is alright to use the simple past tense. Looking at the chart, I saw that the months referred to the past year and not the current year.

I hope I was able to clear up the question in your mind. Feel free to ask me if you have any other concerns :-)
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 25, 2014   #5
Hi, Louisa
It nice to get a clear explanation from you.

. The rules are only hard and unchangeable as you study grammar as an English student.

it is me, lol...

Looking at the chart, I saw that the months referred to the past year and not the current year.

I do agree with your idea to break down the propmt, but what if such condition face me in the examination. Should I write with present or past ?

As we know IELTS writing's exam closely engaged with task responses. Am I in line with the task response if I write such prompt with past ? The suggestion comes from many books require to write this prompt with present.
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Sep 25, 2014   #6
Like I said, the relaxed rules of the English language is reserved for the almost native to native speakers of the language. In this case, I suggest you stick to the rules you were taught regarding the verb tenses. So consider it present tense. This way, you know that you will have followed the guidelines set before you during the review period. Remember, there are no right or wrong answers in an essay. It is all left up to the interpretation of the reader. So just make sure that you answer the essay prompt in the best way that you understood it. Complete the task in the manner that you are used to. Don't take any chances while you are taking the exam. Stick to the rules in order to increase your chance of passing the test.

Be confident in what you know. You have prepared all this time to take the IELTS. Now is not the time to second guess yourself. There will be moments when logic and common sense will come in handy as you interpret the essay prompts. Until the need to use common sense arises though, it would be best for you to not test the waters Do what is expected and take great care in the way that you answer the essay portions.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Sep 25, 2014   #7
Be confident in what you know. You have prepared all this time to take the IELTS. Now is not the time to second guess yourself. There will be moments when logic and common sense will come in handy as you interpret the essay prompts.

I think i need more of my effort to gain it.

Thank you in advance, Lousa. I see and hopefully the common sense will hand in me.
It's nice to share with you :)


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