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There is a tendency of disinterest toward museums and historical sites by local people



asyaaa550 1 / 1  
Apr 14, 2016   #1
Task: Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than local people.
Why is this?
What can be done to encourage local people to visit museums and historical sites?


It is undoubtable fact that there is a tendency of disinterest to museums and historical sites by local people existing. Instead of having a pleasure and delight of pieces of art and places which has a great history, they tend to find other ways to get entertained. On the contrary, tourists and guests of the country finds it as a wonderful opportunity to get acknowledged to the local history, customs, and aspirations. In recent years there has been done a lot of steps and ways found to attract locals to national sights. But this matter is still topical for numerous countries and requires another approach.

One possible approach is to run promotions aimed to eager citizens to visit and get involved in the activities of national sights. These promotions can be done in contribution with employees and guides of museums, which can present places in a very brief and informative way. Although this practice can be released without any problems, there are a lot of issues which can arise. For instance, this practice is already used by several museums but still remain to bring a minimal effect.

An alternative approach would be to give an extra discount to local people; it means that they will not need to pay much money for visiting places. This action would foster to an increase of income and attendance to these places. However this practice is not fair towards international guests and tourists, because they will have to pay pretty much higher price.

A more effective approach is for museums and other cultural institutions to innovate and update the existing programs. These changes can be reached through detailed surveys, which can influence to decisions of marketing and management teams. In my point of view it is vital for them to know visitor's needs and desires. Once they understand it, they can get a great outcome.

JanFan 4 / 6  
Apr 14, 2016   #2
asyaaa550, I read your article and below are my suggestions. Hope they would be helpful.

^ there has been a lot of steps and ways found to attract locals to national sights => there has been a lot of steps and ways MADE to attract locals to national sights

^ aimed to eager citizens => aimed AT eager citizens
^ in contribution with employees and guides of museums, which can.. => in contribution FROM employees and guides of museums, WHO can..
^ this practice can be released => this practice can be TKAEN
justivy03 - / 2265  
Apr 14, 2016   #3
Hi Asyaa, first if all I would like to WELCOME you to the Essay Forum Family and I hope you find this website helpful in your writing references and be useful in coming up with better if not the best essays.

Now, I have a few suggestions for the first 2 paragraphs of your essay and I hope this helps.

1st paragraph
- It is undoubtablean undeniable fact
- of disinterestloosing interest to museums
- havingexperiencea pleasure
- and delight ofin appreciating pieces of
- which has aof great history,
- acknowledgedacquainted to the local history, - been done a lot of steps and
- ways foundmade to attract
- locals to national sights. Butbut this
- requires anothera different approach.

2nd paragraph
- to eagerat raising awareness for citizens
- inwith the contribution
- withfrom the employees
- but still remain to bring a minimalhowever, the effect is very minimal .

Asyaa, the essay is fairly written, there are quiet a lot of work to be done in your essay to make it better, the thing is, you have the idea in your head, you just need to practice a lot more and this is the only way to get better at this craft.
OP asyaaa550 1 / 1  
Apr 15, 2016   #4
@JanFan and @behieli Thank you very much for your answers and suggestions) now i can see all drawbacks in my essay, it really helps me)

@justivy03 thank you a lot for your warm and sweet welcome! Also, i want to thank you for your commands given to me and corrections made) I will fairly follow your recommendations)

It was the fist time i posted my writing, and indeed the answers are so elaborate and solid) so i can really understand what i should rewrite or improve. I really full of energy and motivation to proceed to write and work harder!) THANK YOU VERY MUCH once more)


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