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Teofl - I support that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers.



soshianet 16 / 47  
Sep 24, 2011   #1
Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or
disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people agree with this statement that businesses should hire employees, but some people disagree with that businesses should hire employees. In this regard, I agree that hiring employees or workers has several advantages. I support this idea because businessmen have more important jobs, they are capable of develop their business, and they can get the convenience.

Mainly, businessmen should concentrate on their more important jobs. Businessmen should give attention to the significant affairs, such as management. Also, they have to control their business, and their employees or laborers' activities can help them. For example, businessmen may want to have a business with a firm or company, and they have to manage something around their conventions. In this time, their employees or workers are able do something about materials or preparing goods or commodities, and businessmen are able to adjust conventions.

Moreover, businessmen can develop their business. The most significant purpose of a businessman is making money, and more money will be found in a developed business, such as a businessman who has a lot of money and more capital, so he can invest more and more to make more money. In addition, businessmen plan to expand their business to overseas or foreign countries. For example, some businessmen pursue to export their goods or commodities, and earn more money.

Last but not least, businessmen feel relaxed, and they can get the convenience. They have no stress, and they don't get disturbed because their business towards to a wrong way. In addition, they are able to make a decision easily and strongly. For instance, businessmen are capable of make a decision faraway through telephone or Email.

To sum up, businesses might hire some employees or laborers whom they can pay attention around more important job. They can develop their business, and they can take comfort. That's why I support this statement that businesses hire somebody as their employees or workers.

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nnpurnama 2 / 2  
Sep 24, 2011   #2
hi there :)
try to make new paragraphs for every new points and arguments
it will really help and it will make the reader less tired to read this :)
dumi 1 / 6795  
Sep 24, 2011   #3
Hi,

Some people agree with this statement that businesses should hire employees, but some people disagree with that businesses should hire employees. ---------- try to avoid copying the same words in the theme topic 'cause you may loose marks by doing so. Say it slightly different;

While some people agree that businesses should hire employees for their entire lives, others do not agree with them.

In this regard, I agree that hiring employees or workers for life time has several advantages. I support this idea becausebelieve that businessmeneshave more important jobs, they are capable of need to have people with new skills and competencies time to time in order to develop their business, and they can get the convenience.and stay also to stay in business.


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