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IELTS: theoretical knowledge couples with useful skills are not only practical but also necessary



adriennelin 11 / 24  
Aug 19, 2010   #1
Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer.

What, in your opinion should be the main function of a university?


As more and more people go to universities, the question about what should we teach our future generations raises several concerns. It is some peoples' belief that it is useless to teach something that students will not need when they enter the workforce. On the other hand, some hold the view that university is the temple of knowledge, which is why we should focus on knowledge itself rather than skills. From my point of view, I believe that universities should provide practical skills that can prepare us for future jobs.

Firstly, the reason most students choose to go on further education is so that they can have better qualifications and capabilities, for instance, computer skills, presentation techniques, negotiation training, to obtain a decent job. If schools only provide theoretical knowledge, students would have to start over because they do not have hand-on experiences, which might be overwhelming. The massive amount of tuition they paid might not be worth it.

Secondly, the employment market is so competitive these days that a degree is no longer a guarantee when job hunting. Certificates such as business, computer languages proficiency certificates are stronger weapons. For example, if two people both have an MBA degree, the one with language skills would more likely to be employed. That is, a diploma is no longer enough, unfortunately, students need to be both academically and physically capable if they are to compete in today's economy.

In conclusion, I believe that theoretical knowledge couples with useful skills are not only practical but also necessary. Universities should provide both as they are what future needs.

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Yayz 10 / 94  
Aug 19, 2010   #2
some hold the view that a university is a temple of knowledge

most students choose to go on further their education

qualifications and capabilities, for instancesuch as , computer skills, presentation techniques, and negotiation training

hands -on experience

Certificates such as business, computer languages proficiency certificates are stronger weapons.

You wrote certificates such as...blank and blank certificates. Write either ...blank and blank or ...blank certificates and blank certificates

the one with language skills would more likely to be employed
or
the one with language skills wouldis more likely to be employed

is no longer enough, and, unfortunately

if they are to competesucceed in today's economy.
--anyone can compete but I think you are trying to make a point about success

theoretical knowledge coupled with useful skills areis not only

they are what the future needs.

Wow, you've written really well!

Did I answer the question of the topic correctly?
It seems so. You provided a viewpoint and defended it

Are the examples I provide acceptable?
People go to school so they can succeed in the workforce was right on point--give the people what they came for
The competitiveness of the job market probably isn't as strong because you seem to suggest that an employer values a degree from a university...but that doesn't mean the university has to be experience oriented. I think you should clarify the idea that an employer looks for work-related experience gained in a university. That can really help =)


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