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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981



nguyenquynhquyen 1 / -  
Sep 26, 2025   #1
The pie charts provide information about how spendings on a yearly basis by a particular school in the UK changed in three different years (1981, 1991 and 2001).

Overall, it is clear that while the outlay for insurance was recorded the least throughout the period, teachers' salaries accounted for the highest shares of the total money spent, which was the most noticeable in 1991. Additionally, a similarity that can be seen in most categories was the considerable fluctuation, except for the proportion of spendings on 'insurance', which was relatively stable.

Looking at two aspects where money was mainly invested, teachers' salaries registered 40% initially, twice the figure for the expenditure on other workers' salaries. A decade later, while a fall of 6% was seen in salaries for other workers, its teachers' counterparts experienced a remarkable rise to 50%. Later, there was a decline in both categories, with each going down by around 6%.

Moving on to the remaining aspects of spending, just a small amount, of only 2%, was funded for insurance, whereas the stronger spending power was experienced by the others, ' resources e.g.books ' and ' furniture and equipment ', (at 15%). Regarding the 20-year period, the proportion of money invested in 'insurance' rose at the end of the period, just by almost 4%. Meanwhile, the outlay for ' resources ' jumped to 20% before hitting a decline. By stark contrast, the opposite trend was true for ' furniture and equipment ', rising to 23% once falling.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Sep 27, 2025   #2
The summary overview lacks clarity. There should be a reference to the number of pie charts that were provided. Even though there are 3 years indicated, the reader could assume that there is only 1 pie chart provided, divided into the 3 years. That is obviously not the case but in a task 1 essay, you need to be precise with your description so as to avoid Task Accuracy deductions.

The GRA score for this essay will also be less than stellar. That is because the sentences are mostly run on sentences which relay on commas for separation, There is no real mix of simple, complex, and compound sentences that use various punctuation marks to help differentiate the types of sentences in each paragraph.


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