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Writing Task 1 - Three Problems When Move to Overseas



Anna94 47 / 50  
Oct 25, 2016   #1
The chart below shows information about the problems people have when they go to live in other countries. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make the comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the difficulties that people face when they move to overseas based on the group of age. Overall, in the middle age, people have more severe problems than the other ages. Pursuing education for children are the smallest problems for all age. In the last two groups of age, most people get health life as hardest.

Based on the graph, financial problems is slight increase from young people to middle people by just under 35 percent - 35 percent exactly. However, it fell to under 30% in old people.

Healthy as the most problems people get in the middle age with just under 40%. It is also difficult to old residents with just above 35 percent. However, the percentage of the young residents is 30.

Education for children is easy for old people to face with only just under 5 percent. It is also not hard for young people with just above 5%. However, in the middle age find that it is a big problem with the percentage is more than 35. 176w


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mardian24 46 / 60  
Oct 26, 2016   #2
Hi anna, I'm trying to find some errors
1. Pursuing education for children areis the smallest problems for all age
Because only one subject, so use singular verb, are ----> is
2. ... increase from young people to middle people by just under 35 percent - 35 percent
Where is the changing in young people? The first is 35 percent and the second is 35 percent. It means steady.
3. ... people get in the middle age withto just under 40%
To say the level something reached, use a verb + to


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