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Three questions - checking Introductions for IELTS Task 2



Heru22 5 / 7  
Aug 25, 2016   #1
Question 1 : as global trade increases, many goods, including those we use on a daily basis, are produced in other and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Introduction : One of issue in globalization that global trade rises dramatically. It gives many impacts for human life. In this essay, I explain about advantages and disadvantages of the case.

Question 2 : in many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong while others consider it as valuable work experience. discuss both opinions and give your opinion

In some parts of the world, children should work to fulfill their economic needs. Most people believe that it is beneficial for child to work in their early ages but some of them think that it has many drawback . In this essay, I discus both of view and giving my opinion about the issue.

Question 3 : Unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extend do you agree or disagree?

There are many programs that are given in the school for students. One of them is social community service program. In this program, student should serve society such as teaching, working and other activities without salary. As far as I concern, unpaid community service program is essential program for students because some reason such as building networking, improving EQ, and giving real experience in the workplace so it should be part of high school program

aidafitria18 9 / 13  
Aug 25, 2016   #2
Hi, I'm Aida, and I'll try to fix some mistakes on your post by my version. I hope it will help you.

Introduction : One of issue in globalization is that global trade risesis rising dramatically.
In this essay, Iwill explain about the advantages and disadvantages of the case you should point what the advantage and disadvantage is .
akbarmappiare 31 / 445  
Aug 25, 2016   #3
Hi Agung..
Welcome to EF.
Fortunately, you are a medium offering the facility to improve your skill. I have read this closely. Let me help you to finalize this and give a few suggestions.


Introduction : One of issueS in globalization that global trade rises IS RISING GLOBAL TRADE dramatically.
In this essay, I explain about advantages and disadvantages of the case. (Make you sure that what you write is what you mean. You are supposed to the meaning or your sentence)

... children should work to gain fulfill theireconomic needs A VALUABLE EXPERIENCE IN THEIR LIFE (There was an explanation about the needs, but experience. Call your attention to minor keyword of the statement).

There are many programs that are given in the school for students. One of them ONE OF INNOVATIVE PROGRAMS IN SOME SCHOOLS is social community service program(You meet the prompt quickly and make the light hook to introduce your essay) .

Note: Please, you meet the major and minor keyword in the statement, so your introduction is not out of the topic.
Keep spirit
Good Luck
Faridadwi18 67 / 93  
Aug 25, 2016   #4
Hi Heru,

- One of issueS in globalization that global ...
- ... think that it has many drawbackS . In this essay, I discus both of viewS and giving my opinion ...
- ... working and other activities withoutgetting salary.
... community service program is an essential program for students because some reasonS such as building networking ...

Pay more attention on singular and plural also do not forget to put an article.
Hopefully it helps. Keep Writing


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