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TOEFL: 'tiny problems' CHILDHOOD IS THE HAPPIEST TIME OF A PERSON'S LIFE.



qila 1 / -  
Dec 14, 2010   #1
hi. I am Qila from Malaysia. pls check this essay.

First of all, I do agree with the statement of 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person time', Childhood refers to the time when we were small, about 4 to 11 years old.

The first reason is when we were kids, we have no respobilty or problem to think of. We have more time to play with toys and friends, we were treated like a princess by our parents, and we do not the complicated and heavy problem to think. Maybe the biggest problem when we were small is what color to choose for drawing.

The next reason to support my statement is childhood is the best time for us gain knowledge and understand the life. When we were young, of course we eager to try many things. We try to ride a bicycle, we try to catch grasshopper, and we even play with mud and sand! With this adventure, it actually starts to build interests and give us the experiences that we cannot replace with anything when we become older.

That is why we can see most of people like to think back to their childhood especially when they getting older. Some of people, when they already have their own children, they bring them to village. Parents telling their children about their childhood time, teach them some game which the parents had played. Sometimes even the grandmother or grandfather tells the grandkids some silly and funny stories about their parents when they were young.

As the conclusion, with the reasons and examples i give at above, I do strongly agree that 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life'. The childhood time is the best time in life, the experiences we have been through is irreplaceable and it will cherish in our mind.

hyxhyxhhyx 2 / 3  
Dec 15, 2010   #2
First of all, I do agree with the statement of 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person time', Childhood refers to the time when we were small, about 4 to 11 years old.

The first reason is that when we were kids, we have no responsibility or problem to think of. We have more time to play with toys and friends, we were treated like princesses by our parents, and we didn't have the complicated and heavy problems to think. Maybe the biggest problem when we were small is what color to choose for drawing.

The next reason to support my statement is that childhood is the best time for us to gain knowledge and understand the life. When we were young, of course we were eager to try many things. We try to ride bicycles , we try to catch grasshopper, and we even play with mud and sand! With this adventure, it actually starts to build interests and give us the experiences that we cannot replace with anything when we become older.

That is why we can see most of people like to think back to their childhood especially when they are getting older. Some of people, when they already have their own children, they bring them to village. Parents are telling their children about their childhood time, teach them some game which they had played. Sometimes even the grandmother or grandfather tells the grandkids some silly and funny stories about their parents when they were young.

In conclusion, with the reasons and examples i give at above, I do strongly agree that 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life'. The childhood time is the best time in life, the experiences we have been through is irreplaceable and it will be cherished in our mind.

1.I strongly suggest you to write with Microsoft Word which will automatically check grammar errors for you.
2.You can reorganize the opinions and try various sentence structures.
That's all. Hope you improve your English level soon.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Dec 26, 2010   #3
...of 'Childhood is the happiest time of a person's life.' Childhood refers to ...---Do you see the correction I made to this sentence?

I see also that Yongxian made some corrections. You should practice English by typing the essay again and including the correct sentences we are giving you.

I think you absolutely are fluent in English. Becoming bilingual is a real accomplishment. Now you should "fine tune" your English by correcting the errors noticed by Yongxian. Please make another post and try to write the essay without mistakes, and we will tell you if you still have some mistakes.

:-)


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