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TOEFL_There is something that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.



stellastella 18 / 25  
Jan 11, 2012   #1
There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is one of the human tendencies to learn from different sources. It makes no difference, these sources might be inanimate or animate, such as a book, nature and a person. Therefore, people can learn from each other without any limitation. In my opinion individuals who do not have an academic degree or are uneducated, can teach the others even educated person in two main areas.

For one thing, there are some people how are not educated, however have a wild range of knowledge. These kind of people experience a large number of stuffs during their life, and gain knowledge and information in this way. On the other hand these kind of people are adventurer.

For another thing, there are some individuals who are studious. They read a huge amount of books, newspapers and magazinse and surf through the Internet and read different articles in different areas, and add to their knowledge in this way. So their knowledge sometimes is as an educated person.

All in all, I would maintain that people who are not educated or do not have an academic degree can be a good teacher for the other individuals. They gain their knowledge in different ways and out off academic situations.

apv 3 / 7  
Jan 11, 2012   #2
I wouldnt limit myself of I were you, for example in:

can teach the others even educated person in two main areas

In the precious case I would say: can teach to an educated person in different situations. In this way, you dont seem like you just think that there ar ejust TWO ways of doing this.

Here: For one thing, there are some people how are not educated, however have a wild range of knowledge. These kind of people experience a large number of stuffs during their life,

I would change it like this: For instance, there is some people that may not be as educated as some other people, but they hold a wide range of knowledge instead; (HERE SPECIFY WHY YOU THINK THAT) These kind of people hold these vast quantity of knoledge because of (I WOULD PUT) the different lifestyle that they have to undertake because of the lower income that they might have (OR MAYBE) because of the different situations they have to go through given to their uneducation.. .

I would re-do the essay. You have to think of the essay as if you were writing for the king of england. Write it with very specific and technical words, and try to explain your position on the topic as good as you can.

I am not a native english speaker either, but I know how it works. I did TOEFL iBTand got 96 of 120 (Could have been better though), and I got a 27 of 30 in writing.

Hope it helps!


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