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Banana79 1 / -  
Nov 30, 2021   #1
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"If you were the mayor of your town or village, what would you do to improve the quality of life there?"


Talk about three specific problems. Write an essay of 120-150 words


Ho Chi Minh city is the best place to live where has all of I need such as technology, shopping center, cafe shops, schools and so on. However, nothing is perfect, everything has their own problems and disadvantages, this city is either. In this modern life with full of works, we cannot avoid the traffic congestion in every morning.

Secondly, there are many environment problems which affect our health in negative ways especially the air-population. The last one,we do not have enough awareness to worry about all of these. While we are still polluting our habitats, we are not keen on the bad consequences, the deaths in the future.

If I were a mayor,I would build many bridges above the streets to reduce traffic problems. The small vehicles such as bikes, motorcycles are definitely the priority cases. To reduce air population, I would encourage people to cycle or walk. It would be the effective way to reduce the CO2 emissions and It is good for our health either. However, there is also the fact that awareness of everyone in this city is determinant to decide that it is effective or not. So before stating my plans, I would open a new conference to discuss and let everyone gives their own opinions and let they know what the future is like if we continue harming the environment.

Sum it up, all of above things are just my dreams. However, I really want to improve these problems because if we still keep our bad hobbies like littering, air pollution, our Earth will be soon died by us.

Hello everyone, this is my first time to use this app to improve my writing skills. Sorry if I make any mistakes. I wonder what I should write in Subject because it is not enough for me to write the topic

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15344  
Nov 30, 2021   #2
Learn to outline your ideas before you write the paper. That way, your discussion points are always related and focused on the theme of the paper. In this case, the theme is "What would I do to improve the quality of life in my city as a mayor?" So the outline should focus on discussion related to public health, public safety, and local culture development.

If I were a mayor,I would build many bridges above the streets to reduce traffic problems

Focus on projects a mayor can complete. What you are talking about are national projects. These need more than just the mayor's influence to happen. Look at local projects for the local police, health centers, and local tourism. Those are the areas a mayor has direct control over. You may however, discuss representing the city with the national road development agency if you want to have road projects related to traffic decongestion. I would however, ask you limit the scope of your discussion to just the local things you do not need national approval for.
nhidinh1231 4 / 7  
Nov 30, 2021   #3
Secondly, there are ...
You did not mention the first your logical cause, but went straight to "Secondly".

You should focus on only the problem you want to solve and make it clear and prominent. Mentioning lots of the cause confuses the people to read your writing, and is not effective. Highlight on one, max out this in the aspects that you would mention it in the solution-about paragrapgh


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