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TOEFL TOPIC:Newspaper is the best way of learning about a foreign country.



tshml1990 3 / 9  
Sep 8, 2010   #1
Our curious about foreign countries never fades. If you are a travel enthusiast who is eager to get the travel route in Switzerland, if you are an investor who is pondering site of a branch office abroad, or if you are just a person who want to keep abreast of what happening outside your country, what kind of ways do you prefer, newspaper, internet, or TV? I am pretty sure there are better places to find this information than from the newspaper.

Initially, newspaper bears no resemblance to internet on magnitude. Information from newspaper usually is limited. As everyone knows, a piece of newspaper contains no more than 20 pages, including irrelative information such as advertisements. But internet provides amount of information and knowledge, with greater accuracy, detail, and linkable words than the paper version. Just as I said, want an explicit description about places of interest of a foreign country? Why not go to some traveling websites, which maintain well organized list. Also, reports on newspaper are just one-sided because opinions are narrowed down to specified reporters and editors. In contrast, millions of netizens air their own view on internet, which brings comprehensive information.

On the other hand, TV shows more vivid, indelible pictures than newspaper. Knowledge about a foreign country includes its conventions, culture and also, language. But through newspaper, we can never listen to the varieties dialects in different countries, enjoy diversity kinds of music, nor watch the local unique commemoration. For example, what if a language enthusiast would like to know the pronunciation? TV programs such as talk-shows, documentary films,can reflect the original culture, native customs, and daily life directly.

Last but not the least; newspaper is not professional to learn about a foreign country because it just gives some crush-courses. After all, newspaper is oriented to news. That is to say newspaper pays more attention to hot spots but not concentrate on a country. There are many sections in a piece of newspaper, for instance, economy, politics, science, sports and entertainment, so it is hard to introduce a country professionally.

There is no denying that newspaper is a really good way to get to know a country. Actually, we can learn a lot by reading newspaper. But if you want to learn about a foreign country deeply and systematically, newspaper is not the best choice.

muroslav 2 / 5  
Sep 8, 2010   #2
Our curiouscuriosity about foreign countries never fades. - curious is adjective, and in this case you need a noun.

what kind of ways which information source do you prefer - newspaper, internet, or TV?
I think this makes the sentence more unambiguous.

I am pretty quite sure - "pretty" is more informal, so i suggest you to use "quite".

we can never listen to the varieties various (or "variety of") dialects in different countries - variety is a noun and you need adjective.

I have one question - i really like the word "netizen" and it is in Oxford Dictionary, does this means that i can use it without any concerns at the TOEFL essay ?
OP tshml1990 3 / 9  
Sep 8, 2010   #3
Thank you so much.I am not sure, but I think we can use it~By the way, what do you think I need to improve about my essay?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Sep 10, 2010   #4
The subject of the first sentence is "curiosity," not curious. Curious is an adjective, so it cannot be the subject of a sentence. The subject must be a noun.

So practice the way Murcho showed you several times. Thanks Murcho, we are lucky to have you here! :-)

Hey, you should capitalize Internet.

Also, I really like the clarity of the essay. You make a good argument to support a clear thesis. That is very good.

To improve your skill a very important chore is to write an essay about something you really care about. I don't think you really care so much about telling people about alternatives to newspaper. You write very well, and although Murcho fixed some errors you really have a lot of potential... so I hope you will write an essay soon about something you really care about.

For example, my sister recently lost a letter grade because she was unwilling to dissect a frog in biology class. She wrote an essay about it, and it really must have improved her writing.

You already know how to write a good thesis sentence and good paragraphs. Now I'll give you a homework assignment: write an essay about something you care about.

For this essay, you should add more discussion to the conclusion paragraph. :-)
suve 4 / 8  
Sep 11, 2010   #5
I have following suggestions;
you write;Initially, newspaper bears no resemblance to internet on magnitude;
First and foremost the power of newspaper in respect of delivering information to the reader is much inferior to that of internet. As everyone knows, a piece of newspaper contains no more than 20 pages that includes mostly irrelative (irrelevant) information such as advertisements.

If you want any explicit(detailed ) description about places of interest of a foreign country you should visit thetravel websites, which maintain well organized list(lists ). Also, reports on newspaper are often biased .
OP tshml1990 3 / 9  
Sep 12, 2010   #6
Thank you very much, Kevin! I would try my best as your advice~


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