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Topic: Television's relevence



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Oct 1, 2025   #1
TOPIC:Some people believe that watching television is a waste of time. Others think it has educational value. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In an age defined by rapid technological change, the relevance of television is being re-evaluated. While many people view it as unnecessary and trivial, others firmly defend its role in education and society. This essay aims to explore both sides of the argument before reaching a reasoned conclusion.

On the one hand, opponents argue that television undermines one's mental state by trapping them in a loop of ephemeral contentment. Being short-lived, this fabricated feeling of ecstasy often compels viewers to seek more content, ultimately ensnaring individuals in an inescapable trap which they remain largely unaware of . If this indulgence transpires into a routine activity, it will form within the minds of individuals a mental roadblock, hindering the completion of other unfinished tasks. Besides the mental concerns, it also adversely affects the human body. Immersed in the television screen, viewers often adopt poor posture or sit too close to the screen, gradually and directly compromising their physical well-being.

On the other hand, proponents contend that the benefits of television far outweigh the health concerns, which can be mitigated with proper education and moderation. Many programmes themselves provide guidance on safe viewing habits, while educational and governmental channels deliver factual and practical knowledge. Documentaries and public service broadcasts, for instance, raise awareness about pressing issues such as climate change, public health and cultural preservation. MOreover, television can serve as a unifying medium through shared knowledge and experience across cultures, fostering social cohesion.

In conclusion, while critics rightfully underline the psychological and physical drawbacks of excessive television consumption, these risks can be minimised through thorough education and responsible viewing habits; moreover, the educational and social value of television remains significant in contemporary society. Therefore, rather than dismissing it as irrelevant and obsolete, I firmly believe it is more reasonable to recognise its relevance while ensuring moderation and sage engagement.

After your criticism of my previous essay, i've spent about an hour (by myself, of course) on writing and refining this essay. Although this essay would have obviously received a failing score on the real test due to the time it took me to finish, i'd say i am proud of what i've come up with. I would love to hear your honest thoughts on this essay. Thank you
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Oct 2, 2025   #2
The task 2 essays do not and will not ask you to come to a conclusion in your presentation. The job of the essay is to inform the reader rather than make a decision for them. It is up to the reader to come away from your essay with acceptable information for them to make an educated decision on their own. Never say you will make a conclusion for the reader.

You need to learn to brainstorm and draft ideas before actually writing your essay. Before you write your draft, break the prompt down into parts such as the following:

Topic: watching television is a waste of time.

Pro: it has educational value
Con: a waste of time

Develop:
Pro: Reason for public support ? Example My opinion? Example. (10 minutes)
Con: Why is it supported? Example. My opinion? Example. (10 minutes)

Write the draft (10 minutes) then check the quality and clarity of the presentation (10 minutes)

Total time usage: 40 minutes.

If you notice, you end up simplifying your discussion paragraphs when you first, outline your discussion. You immediately end up with 3 -4 sentences per paragraph, keeping you within the safe word count. You should always use the correct pronouns such as "they" and then "I" when writing your POV. These pronouns will add clarity to your discussion and avoid GRA and C+C deductions due to lack of clarity in your discussion. Using this format will allow you to focus on the writing of the essay itself within 40 minutes.


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