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The total count of girls per hundred boys took admissions at a different level of education


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Jan 13, 2021   #1

number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education



The bar graph depicts the information about the total count of girls per hundred boys took admissions at a different level of educations such as primary, secondary and tertiary in developing nations and developed countries in the year of 1990 and 1998.

It can be clearly seen that the total number of women in primary education level was 83 in the developing countries in 1990 while, in 1998, it was 87. In the developed countries the count of girls admissions was almost the same in the year of 1990 and 1998, which was approximately 96. However, in the secondary education level, 82 ladies enrolled in the developing countries in 1998 whereas, in 1990, it declined by 10.

Moving to the remaining illustration, the number of girls near about the limit of target in the developed countries in the year of 1990 and 1998 which was 98 and 99. In contrast, at the third level of education the number of girls was 66 in developing countries while in developed countries, it was above the target limit which was 105 in 1990. However, in 1998, the count of females was 75 in developing countries while, in the developed countries it was 112.

Hence, it can be analysed that the count of girls was highest in the third level of education.
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Jan 14, 2021   #2
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