The global sale of hybrid vehicles is showed in below chart between 2006 and 2009. The kinds of countries which participate in this survey that are Japan, US, and other. Overall, the total sales in 2009 were the twice amount of the total sales in 2009 and it includes the upward trend.
Firstly, Japan always increases the sale of hybrid transport between 2006 and 2009, which it has the highest number of sales at almost 350 thousand that it increased extremely from 2008 to 2009. Not only Japan has highest sales, but also it has the lowest number of hybrid vehicle sales approximately 50 thousand.
Secondly, Ushas up and down trend of the hybrid transport sales which it has the lowest number of sales about 250 thousand vehicles and also the US has the highest number of hybrid sales by 100 thousand in 2007 or from one year before in 2006.
Thirdly, the other countries have the gradual increase about 50 thousand transports from 2006 to 2009 which the smallest number of hybrid vehicle sales at 50 thousand, also the highest number is over 100 thousand and below in 150 thousand of the hybrid vehicle.
Hello ike this is my correction for you. please give me your correction too.
The global sale of hybrid ... >> you better change this (The graph shows sale of hybrid vehicle during 4-years period between 2006 and 2009 )
... participate in this survey thatthere are Japan, US, and other
the words which you write it just below 150, you must more practice to writing. and don't forget you speeling must be right.
thanks
Hi,below trough my advie for you.
1. ... of hybrid vehicles is showedis shown(passive) in below chart (below chart? no chart you attach in your summary) between 2006 and 2009.
2. ... were the twice amount number (countable) of the total sales ...
3. ... which participate in thissurvey that are Japan, US, and other ---> remember, in the part I of IELTS writing task, do not add your opinion . No one word says that that is a survey.
4. Overall, you use the wrong tenses. you should use pas tense to represents the bar chart.
Overall, the total sales in 2009 were the twice amount of the total sales in 2009 sorry i don't understand in this sentence and it you should make clear where is "it" reverse to .... includes the upward trend. i saw that this trend irregular pattern sometimes down and up, make sure about the trend.
which it is has the highest number of sales ...
hello yurii.. this is my suggestion for your writing
... number of sales at almost 350 thousand that it increased e...
Not only Japan has the highest sales, (...) approximately 50thousand.
... number of sales about 250 thousand vehicles and also the US (...) by 100 thousand in 2007 or from one ...
... increase about 50 thousand transports from 2006 (...) sales at 50 thousand , also the highest number is over 100 thousand and below in 150thousand of the hybrid vehicle.
1. thousand ==> you can mention unit in the introduction paragraph to avoid repetition
2. pay attention about superlative and the article that should be used in this case
3. you should attach the picture owing to the fact that other people do not know about data that you mean.
it is better to insert the picture in your writing feedback.
... of hybrid vehicles is showed(shown) in below chart ...
The kinds of countries which participate in this survey that are Japan, US, and other(others) . Overall, the total sales in 2009 were the twice amount of the total ...(I think you should check again this sentence )
Firstly, Japan always increases(increased) the sale of hybrid (...), which it has(had) the highest number ...
Not only Japan has(had the) highest sales, but (it) also it]has(had) the lowest number ...
Hi let me give some comments
1. Firstly, Japan always increasesincreased the sale of hybrid ...
The time is between 2006 and 2009 which is already happening, so you have to use past tense.
2. which it hashad the highest number ...
Same as for number 1, you have to use past tense
3. ... countries have thea gradual increase ...
Increase is verb, because there is a verb 'have' you need to change increase by adding article 'a'
Thank You
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