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IELTS Writing Task 2 - Tourism's influence economy and environment



leaf2301 1 / 2  
Oct 25, 2021   #1
Some people believe that tourism promotes the economy while other argue that tourism destroy the environment.

Discuss both views.



Tourism proponents believe that promoting tourism is an effective way to boost the economy of a country, whereas others focus on the point that tourism involves directly to the environmental concerns, opposing the idea of developing tourism. From a neutral perspective, tourism is actually capable of having both positive and negative influences.

On the one hand, financial merits that tourism brings are massive. Let us take Thailand as a typical example. As reported on Thailandnews on 24 January in 2019, the industry was a major contributor to the country's economy, accounting for about 5,65 percent (or 5,6 billion dollars) of the gross domestic product (GDP). Not only that, tourism was also one of Thailand's largest sectors of employment, creating jobs for over 4 million people in the year. Amidst Covid-19 pandemic in 2020, great lack of tourists, leading to the rate of unemployment increasing, seemed to be one of the reasons of social unrest, many protests in the country.

On the other hand, tourism, as other human activities, poses a great threat to the environment. As the industry develops, many hotels and restaurants are constructed to meet travelers' demands. This activity not only leads to depleting of natural resources, but also sabotages the fauna and flora by reason of the need of land. Secondly, tourists often have a penchant for over-consumption in their indulgent moments when travelling. This means they are more likely to consume more products and then dispose more waste such as food and plastic containers, increasing their carbon footprint and affecting negatively the surroundings.

In sum, tourism is advantageous yet disadvantageous since simultaneously it brings economic development and the environmental problems. (275)

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15385  
Oct 26, 2021   #2
From a neutral perspective, tourism is actually capable of having both positive and negative influences.

The prompt provided only indicates a paraphrasing of the 2 original ideas. It is not asking for the willis opinion ora neutral puspective. Without specific instructions asking for this, this sentence should not be included in the presentation. Unless, you provided me with an incomplete writing prompt?

As reported on Thailandnews

There is no need for research cited information in the presentation. All evidence must be based on personal knowledge. experience or publicly known information. To create a publicly know information from this, the source material should be removed. There will not be time for you to do research during the 40 minute test. Niether will you have internet access at the testing center. Practice without research.

In sum, tourism is advantageous yet disadvantageous since simultaneously it brings economic development and the environmental problems.

The discussion must be neutral. The essay does not require you to come to a conclusion for the reader. Therefore, topic restatements with reasons are needed for the concluding summary, but not a conclusion. Your job as the writer is only to inform the reader, allowing him to decide for himself.
OP leaf2301 1 / 2  
Oct 26, 2021   #3
@Holt Thanks for answering. I agree with you the first and third remarks; however, I am supposed that the information given in IELTS writing is not necessarily true, so I use pseudo information, which in this case, I made up.

Is it ok as it took me not so much time? or is using received knowledge a must?
hieuvo218 1 / 2  
Oct 26, 2021   #4
I think you need to add more in your conclusion, maybe a recommendation.
OP leaf2301 1 / 2  
Oct 26, 2021   #5
@hieuvo218
Thanks for answering. But don't "think" pls. Please give me reliable information that you know for sure. And I really appropriate if you could add reasons, sources, or explanations. Tks


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