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Travel with a Companion or Travel Alone?



amra125 1 / -  
Aug 23, 2017   #1
Some people like to travel with a companion. Other people prefer to travel alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

It is for my school's proficiency exams. It is similar to IELTS task 2. Thanks.

Instruction: Try to show that your written English is good enough for university study.
(Do not, for example, use only very short, simple sentences.)

Choice Travel

Everyone thinks that a lot of people do not like to travel alone. People need a friend for a good trip. However, this idea has wrong sides. Some people like to travel with a companion, contrast to this some people like to travel alone. Both of these has different advantages and disadvantages.

Firstly, a person who prefers to travel alone can focus on himself on the way. An individual who is travelling alone can do whatever he wants to do. For instance, he can watch series and think about his life or a situation. However, it can be boring after some hours. If he bored, he would search for a friend. If he has a friend on the road, he can talk various subjects with his friend.

Secondly, on a long trip people who are travelling together can have different sleeping and eating habits. Some people prefer to sleep early than normal on a long journey. Other people prefer to sleep regularly. What is the logic of travelling together if my friend sleeps when I am awake. Also, in a long trip, eating habits become more important than regular because you will not have numerous options on a long trip like you have in your city. If you travel alone, you will be free to choose your eating and sleeping habits.

As a result, people can prefer to travel alone or with a friend. If someone travel alone, he will have freedom, also he can be bored. If someone travels with a companion, he can spend time more right with his friend. Also, he will lose to choice some important things. I think travelling alone is much better than travelling with a friend because of freedom of choice.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15466  
Aug 23, 2017   #2
Amra, I would say that this is a high school level English writing. There are still a number of problems with your sentence development that shows difficulty on your part when it comes to using tenses and connecting words. Problems such as "early" when you meant to say "earlier" provides the evidence for your tense usage. The connecting word usage problem can be seen, for example in the sentence "... he can watch series..." when what you needed to say was "... he can watch A TV series...". This provides a connecting word (a) and a subject word (TV series) in the sentence.

Since this test will be based on the IELTS Task 2 test, you should make sure to create a strong opening statement that properly paraphrases the prompt and provides a discussion outline, which is the manner in which the complex sentence structures immediately come to the attention of the examiner. Therefore, it would be better to say:

There are instances when people prefer to travel with companions. Sometimes, people prefer to travel alone. In this essay, I will discuss the reasons why I believe that traveling with a companion is a better option.

As you can see, I properly restated the prompt and provided an essay outline for the discussion. Since the essay asks you to pick only one method of travel, either with or without a companion, the fact that you decided to discuss the benefits of traveling first, with a companion, then second, without a companion, means that you did not understand the instructions you were provided. The resulting essay that you wrote did not follow the instructions you were provided so that means this essay will fail the test.

While your English writing skills are intermediate, your English comprehension skills are not. You did not accurately understand the original instructions, which is why you made a mistake in your discussion process. This is proof that your level of English understanding skills are not yet of university level.


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