Unanswered [1] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width   Posts: 3


Trends on non-cash transactions; IELTS writing tips on Graphs



falks405 4 / 9  
Dec 27, 2012   #1
Hello, could anyone give me some advice how to improve this essay?

The graph shows the general trends non-cash transactions in the UK that was created by cheques, debit and credit card payments methods.

As we can see, most of all transactions were made by consumers with using debit cards through the period 1991 to 2007. Meanwhile, cheques operations declined steadily approximately from 2.3 to 0.9 billion instructions whereas debit cards reached over the 5 billion. In contrast, credit and charge cards transactions rose from 0.7 to 1.9 billion over the whole period.

On the other hand, there has been such a big difference between the ends of a period. Cheques were created mostly at the beginning 1991 compare to others methods of payments. Then, suddenly, debit cards grew steeply exceeding amount others.

In summarize, the graph illustrated that debit cards payments were grown up between 1991 and 1997 whereas cheques disappeared twice in numerous. Moreover, credit and charge card increased steadily reached a pick about 1.9 billion operations in 2004.


  • graph


dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 27, 2012   #2
non-cash transactions in the UK that waswere created by cheques

transaction that was created/ transactions that were created

The graph shows the general trends non-cash transactions in the UK that was created by cheques, debit and credit card payments methods.

The graph shows the general trends of non-cash transaction performances in the UK such as cheque and credit/debit card transactions.

most of all transactions

. "most" makes all "redundant"
most transactions/ all transactions


Home / Writing Feedback / Trends on non-cash transactions; IELTS writing tips on Graphs
Do You Need
Academic Writing
or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳