Twelve different nations and the number of medals that they have achieved in Olympic events

IELTS Writing Task 1: Bar chart

The chart below shows the total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Given is the graph providing the comparison of twelve different nations in terms of the number of medals that they have achieved in Olympic events.

Overall, the USA is the country with the highest number of medals whereas the lowest belongs to Japan. It is also noticeable that the proportion of gold, silver and bronze medals won by any particular nation tend to be fairly similar.

The USA has won a total of around 2300 medals, which is more than twice the reward attained by the second-best country, Soviet Union. American athletes have achieved about 900 gold, 750 silver, and 650 bronze medals. Similarly, the number of gold medals won by the Soviet Union is marginally higher than the number of silver or bronze medals (400, 350 and 350, respectively).

As for the ten remaining countries, while the figures for the total medals won by Uk, France, Germany, and Italy are more than 500, those of other nations are all bellow 500, with the lowest recorded in Japan at about 400 medals. In addition, the number of gold medals attained by China is approximately double that of silver medals.

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