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"Two head is better than one head" - studying with other people provide an extra ideas or knowledge



antun 1 / -  
Mar 25, 2015   #1
Topic: Which do you prefer studying with group or studying alone?

Time: 2h

There are varieties of styles for studying. Many people experience some of them.

We can categorize them into two types of studying. One of them is studying alone and

another is studying with group. Some prefer studying alone but, I prefer studying with a

group than another one. My idea is based from gaining the variety of ideas, mutual effect

and nourishing sociality.

From the perspective of gaining the variety of ideas, studying with other

people provides the idea or knowledge that you don't have or cannot have. There is a line

about this point. That is, "Two heads are better than one head". For example, you have a

research paper about one of the foreign cultures. You might write it, using the internet or reading

books alone. However if you would study with a group, you could ask your friend what s/he

thinks about it. The research paper would have more objective ideas from them, but also

have your ideas. Thus, studying with group bring the variety of ideas.

Moreover, group-study gives us positive mutual effect. By studying with together,

there would be the opportunities to know the level of proficiency around the one student.

From this experience, the student would start thinking that s/he needs to study hard to

catch up with one's friends. On the other hand, the friends would also be stimulated by the

student, when they help the student to study and see the student's effort. I believe this

mutual effect is one of the most ideal ways to have the general students study.

In conclusion, studying with a group is the one of the best way to know how to

deal with other people. Indeed, studying alone is effective in several occasions, but

studying with a group has the important role as nourishing socially. It provides us the

opportunity to know the unique ideas, the effect of teamwork, and also to become a social

person. These are the reason why I prefer to study with a group.

EF_Carol - / 145  
Mar 25, 2015   #2
Your essay is very insightful, into the kinds of studying! I really think you have a grasp, on why it's better to study in a group. It's clear you have an opinion, from the three reasons that you give, for preferring the studying, group style. Your ideas are expressed clearly, as you introduced them one at a time. Then the elaboration is enough, for each point.

I shortened some of your sentences, without losing meaning. I also added commas to allow the reader to breath, in some of the other sentences. Some spelling had to be corrected, as did some word choices.

Your essay is enjoyable to read and very precise in its organization. You present the argument, then give three reasons. Then you devote one paragraph to each reason. I think that makes sense. Then by the time you reach your conclusion, the reader should feel convinced!

Good luck!

ef_carol
nazmarta 2 / 2  
Mar 25, 2015   #3
overall you explain everything and give examples. however you need to fix some grammar issues.
and you can also provide one example of a benefit of studying alone. it would make your essay well rounded.


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