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Understanding the culture of a country without knowing it's language: Language and Culture essay


Afdhel 14 / 21 1  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language.
Do you agree with this opinion?


Since human was created by God, language is a tool to communicate and understand a culture where the human can do contact to other people and learn with regard to custom. Some people view that someone should accept the cultural disparity while others believe that it is so notable to know the language of the tradition to catch on the message. In my point of view, it is true that language has significance place to play role in understanding a tradition, but it is not one and only factor.

There are merits for the people who are able to grasp a language of the civilization. They can easy to interact in one of the native people and build the solidarity among each other. This is due to the fact that linguistic understanding of an individual is more acceptable for certain inhabitant when the person wants to build the solidarity.

However, there is another factor that an individual is able to understand the culture. One of them is to learn in the neighborhood of cultural norm or traditions. For instance, we are able to how the native people respects the foreigner, how they greet the other people and so on. As a result, we can know how we interact with them even though we get the lack of language.

To conclude, there is no doubt that language has an important role to catch on the culture, but any another point which help us to study the culture. However, it is better if we own both of factors to understand the culture deeply.

Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
Nousha, I hope that this is the first practice test that you have written that is because, if you are a first timer, the score of 4, which this essay would get in an actual test, is an acceptable score. However, if this is not your first essay, then there is a clear set of problems that you have to address. This essay needs a lot of work at this point.

You display a very weak capability to construct even the simplest English sentence. The lack of clarity in the thought process and wring word usage causes the reader to have extreme difficulty in recognizing what it is that you wish to say. I believe that this is caused by your limited English vocabulary. You should look into improving your use of word connectors, and the use of subordinate clauses when necessary. Make sure that you do everything that you can to further improve your knowledge and use of English words. That is something that can only get better with practice and dedication to learning the language.

I hope to see signs of improvement in your next essay.
ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Oct 27, 2016   #3
Hi Afdhel! Let me try to give you some feedback, hope this helps.

(1) As far as I know, we should not use 'human' if the essay/writing does not mention about other creatures like 'plant' or 'animal' as the comparison, so it will be better if we just use 'people' or 'man'.

(2) A good paragraph consists of at least 3 sentences, so you need to add more information in the conclusion paragraph to make it stronger.

Since human was created by God,(...) where the human can do contact to ...
... role in understanding a tradition, but it is not one and only factor. (This is an interesting idea that you add about other factor to understand a tradition, and you succeed to explain this idea in the body paragraph)

... how the native people respects respect the foreigner, ...
To conclude, there is no doubt that ... (only two sentences)

Keep writing!! ^^


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