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University courses- Line graph - IELTS WARRIOR



Mr Calma 17 / 2  
Sep 3, 2025   #1
FCQ3-2025-T1

The line graph illustrates the proportion of female learners enrolled in four distinct courses at a university between 1970 and 2015. Overall, the percentage of female students increased in all subjects except Computer Science, which fluctuated and eventually declined. Law consistently attracted the highest percentage of female scholars, while Computer Science ended with the lowest share.

In 1970, the number of female students registered in law courses was the smallest at nearly one-tenth; however, after 3 decades, it rose significantly to about 90%. Before reaching its peak of 100%, female students attending this course decreased slightly to around 85%. From 1985 to 1990, the number of female learners studying medicine surged dramatically by about 40%, and then climbed until 2010, before dropping marginally to approximately 87%. The Physics course remained stable in the first decade in the share of female students. Nevertheless, the figure increased substantially to nearly 60%, then remained unchanged for the next five years, and recorded a rise to almost 80% at the end of the period.

Regarding the most fluctuated category, with the highest start at roughly 35%, the proportion of female scholars attending computer science increased slightly to about 38% in the first 10 years, before climbing remarkably to around 70%. Nonetheless, there was a decrease relative to its initial point by 2015.

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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15921  
Sep 6, 2025   #2
The summary overview is missing a proper presentation of the 4 courses and the type of measurement used to represent the enrollees in an overall manner. This is the given missing link in this oaragraph even as you showed improvement in your information presentation for the summary section.

The data reporting paragraph in the 2nd paragraph could have been better presented. It is rushed and does not make good use of the comma and other punctuation marks to serve as a pause in the reading material. The examiner will feel overwhelmed by that paragraph and may opt to deduct from your GRA score since that is where punctuation mark usage is scored.

The last paragraph is a run on sentence. You need to learn how to divide your information presentation into separate, but related sentences. Always present at least 3 sentences per paragraph. That is the minimum count.


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