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Using Security Cameras in the Supermarket

ashelarisa48 36 / 52 4  
Sep 23, 2016   #1
Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

As a development in security, using a sophisticated technology such a camera in the public area like in the supermarket is more and more increase. It aims to capture all activities happening in the supermarket to prevent a stealing case while the buyers are often unaware to be monitored. Although the cost to apply it is quite expensive, I really believe it effectively helps the keepers to oversee the bustling in the supermarket in order to prevent a crime such a stealing.

Several shops decide not to use the cameras to keep watching the condition around. It is more likely to ensue as a camera with a high resolution and good quality has a high price at approximately over 100 dollars per item. Taking an example, a manager of violet supermarket in New Jersey admitted that he preferred to utilize the income to maintain the building and to supply new products than installing the security cameras in the supermarket. He also argued that it was the shopkeepers' job to watch the purchasers while they were picking the products. Unfortunately, it is inevitable that the keepers sometimes are careless to monitor manually, then the stealing can be occurred.

Placing the security cameras in the every corner of supermarket is considered to be the best way to capture a stealing case. Although it needs a high cost, the business will not experience the disadvantage because of missing their products. A data from world technology magazine in 2012 shows a number of rustlings in the most of supermarket in some Asian countries is successful to be revealed and the doers can be arrested due to the recording by the security cameras. In addition, it can also be an alternative device to find such a bag or wallet of the purchasers which is left out in the supermarket.

By the reason, the expensive price of the cameras is not being a problem if it is compared with its advantages in order to prevent the stealing. Monitoring the condition in supermarket by using cameras is expected to be able to decrease the number of stealing cases, so that it will be safer and the business will not lose their benefit.

justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Sep 24, 2016   #2
Hi Ashela, I believe this is the first time that I'm writing a review on your essay and I hope this helps.

At a glance, I must say that the essay has started strong, the ideas you presented towards the importance of the security cameras in supermarkets are very relevant to todays worls and this type of association is very crucial in writing as this means that you understand what you are writing and you definitely know what you want your readers to understand.

However, as much as the essay started good, the concluding part of the essay did not end that well, therefore I'd like to share a few insights that will help you in your revision.

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- the expensive price of the cameras is not being a problem
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- in order to prevent the stealing.
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- number of stealingtheft cases,

There you have it Ashela, I hope the above remarks are helpful in your revision and for future writing reference, make sure that when you start the essay strong, keep it in that intensity and make it even stronger in the end as the concluding part is somehow that last one that retains in the minds of the readers.

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