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sssenyoritaa 2 / 4  
Aug 19, 2014   #1
Searching through the Internet could be extremely time-saving. In other words, There is no necessary for societies to spend big amount of time in book stores. For instance, There have been numbers of book sailing sites such as amazon. Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities these days,but also it could be leaded to demoting the traffics through the keeping individuals in their houses.

milamiller 4 / 6 5  
Aug 19, 2014   #2
Searching through the Internet could be extremely time-saving. In other words, There isit is notno necessary for societies to spend big amount of timemuch time in book stores. For instance, There have been numbers of book sailing sites such as amazonthere are many helpful websites such Amazon which sell different types of electronic books . Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities these days,but also it could be leaded to demoting the traffics through the keeping individuals in their houses.I don't think that the last sentence is revelant because the essay-checker might find it incoherent .

I think you should consider improving your vocabulary skills along with the sentence structuring. Try reading other students' essays so you could have an example how to structure yours
OP sssenyoritaa 2 / 4  
Aug 20, 2014   #3
incoherent

Thanks for your advise.
The last sentence that I wrote , was for the effect of online learning. should i wrote it in other ways?
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 20, 2014   #4
Let see how I can contribute to you :D
Not only the Internet is in urgent need of communities these days,but also it could beleadedlead to demoting reduce the trafficstraffic bythroughthe keeping individuals in their houses.

This is what I suggest;
Not only the Internet is a mandatory requirement of everybody in the modern world, but also it helps reduce traffic jams on roads by promoting people to work from home.


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