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Water Cycle Base on The Location Where It is Dropped



yonathan66 30 / 27  
Mar 22, 2016   #1
The diagram shows how rainwater is reused.

The water cycle process is displayed in the diagram where it start as rainwater until it come back to the river after several usage. According to diagram, it can be seen that though there are three different processes depend on the rainwater dropped, but all of them are bringing back the water into the river.

The first process is begun when rain water drop in the reservoir such as Dam, and it flows toward Water Treatment Plant where the rainwater will be treated by several process before it is ready to be consumed by human. The second process is started when rain water drop directly around houses. It will be kept in rain water tank and used for human activities. The wastewater then will be streamed toward Wastewater Treatment Plant where the water will also get several process here.

After this process, there are two possibility of the water usage. First, the recycled water will be used by human for several activities, exclude consumption, and the second, it will be flowed directly to the river. Besides that, there is also Stormwater Treatment where the rainwater has not been used by human, but it streams toward the river immediately after it dropped on the Earth. Moreover, the process is repeated again.


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justivy03 - / 2265  
Mar 23, 2016   #2
Hi Yonathan, I would like to help modify your essay, to start, your overall analysis is good, however, it is not clearly written in the essay, so let's focus on that.

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- The second process is started when
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- two possibilitypossibilities of the water usage. - hasis not been used by human,
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As I mentioned, overall, it's a well written analysis and you were able to explain the diagram in a way that the readers can follow through and will understand what is exactly happening.


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