The water cycle has three natural steps which start by evaporation water through the rain process.

The diagram illustrates the information regarding the water cycle works. Overall, it has had three cycle natural steps which start by evaporation water through the rain process.

To begin with, the evaporation from the sea because of Sun's heat and invisible water vapor. Other ways is that the evaporation from lakes and rivers and also transpiration from plants and trees. After that, the wind carried out water vapor to the high lands. In this step, the vapor faces the cold temperatures and it involves a cloud which contains a lot of water.

In addition, after the clouds arrive in high hills by helping from the wind, the clouds cool further and make a rainfall. More broadly, after the rain cycle, the water carried downstream by river and flows in the sea. Another way is that the ground water flows into lakes, rivers and seas. Furthermore, the water is stored in sea and the process will restart.

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Muhamad, please remember that the overview summary of the diagram needs to have a minimum of 3 sentences in order to be considered within the required format of the essay. You should have divided the long sentence about the the cycle steps into two. The third sentence could have been represented by the start of the evaporation process summary.

The second paragraph is a bit confusing as it seems to be lacking a topic or subject in the first sentence. There is no point to what was said hence, the sentence did not have any information to add to your summary. The part where you spoke of transpiration was a direct quote from the diagram. Always try to rephrase the information from the original source in order to improve your lexical score. by simply using the original description, you will tend to lose points.

Overall, the essay is a bit confusing to read. There is a tendency for miscommunication as you have incomplete thoughts in some sentences or mistakenly used terms throughout the essay. I believe that you will get better over time. Just take note of the problems that you have in this essay so that you can be conscious to not make the same mistake again.

Hi,

The diagram illustrates the information regarding the water cycle workscirculation of water in nature. (its sound better)

Hello! I will give you some opinions about your essay.

(1) ... the information regardingin regards to how the water cycle works.
(2) Overall, it has had three cycle ...
Overall, the cycle has three steps which are started from the evaporation process, the process of rain and how the water seep below the surface as a groundwater

(3) To begin with, the evaporation from ...
To begin with, the water is evaporated from the sea, lakes, and rivers due to the sun's heat, also through transpiration process from surrounding plants and trees that forming clouds in the sky

(4) ... and it involves a cloud which containssaturates with a lot of water.