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IS WEARING UNIFORM NECESSARY FOR STUDENT?



alybaba510 1 / 1  
Oct 4, 2010   #1
thank you for your help...!~~^_^

Nowadays,most of the schools have their own uniform,and they always insist that students must wear the uniform when going to school.Personally,I think wearing uniform is good for the student.

Firstly,uniform symbolizes that you are a student,also representing the school in which you are attending.Whenever you wear it,you should behave well.

Secondly,one can save time to study for not wasting time on choosing which clothes to wear prior to going to school.You do not need spending much more money to buy the clothes too,because most of your time will be spent in school.It is also a way to save money.

Consequently,studengs should wear the uniform to school,because it is not only beneficial for the school,but also offers students some extra time to study.

mea505 - / 265  
Oct 4, 2010   #2
thank you for your help...!~~^_^

Hi Cai!

I think that your essay, while on the right track, so to speak, is too short. You need to expound on the three paragraphs, by telling the readers why you think the way you do. What makes the uniform so special, as opposed to regular clothes? You can also talk about the many students who don't like to wear the uniform as it takes away from their sense of the individual. Have you heard of that before? Does the uniform really save the student money? Can you justify your answer? These are some of the other things that you can talk about in your essay. Currently, your essay consists of three paragraphs, and each one contains only a few lines. This needs to be expanded.

Why does the student need to behave well when he or she wears the uniform? Has this been documented somewhere? Where did you hear about this? Is it really true? This and some other things can be "talked about" in the essay.

--Mark :)
OP alybaba510 1 / 1  
Oct 4, 2010   #3
thinks a lot!..I think I'm lack of vocabulary and viewpoint to support it.,actually it's too short,it's almost one year I haven't write any essay,so I have no idea about that..but thank you your advice! you reminded me ~ now, I need to prepare again.. thanks!


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