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"Be Weary of their Expectations"
Do you, as a teenager, think other people's expectations
are the right thing to live up to? If so, you should take the time to
realize that you cannot follow others. Several examples from the
past and present clearly demonstrate how trifling other's ideas
are.
Everyone should realize that they only have one life to
live. For example, a person starts life being incapable of
discerning right from wrong. They grow up learning the
fundamentals of life. During their childhood, they make several
mistakes that they luckily can learn from. But, however, some
they cannot. These involve following others expectations.
Although the expectations of their parents, sometimes, are have
good intentions, the persons peers and those that abhor them try
to micromanage them in the wrong direction. As a result, these
weaken minded people spend their life following others. It's
obvious that they must take a stand for themselves, or they'll
waste their one and only chance at living.
Besides the previous statement, teens should not follow
other people's expectations as they may not be in their best
interest. Chhaya Werner, a junior in high school, is a prime
example of someone who is fully versed in this topic. He states
that ". . . giving in" to someone's expectations ". . . can influence a
person to do something that has more serious consequences."
This doesn't help a person and obviously has no benefits. Instead,
this person gets is confused and cannot make their own decisions
for their welfare.
At last, following others should not happen as it may lead
to death and suicide. After all, a person that follows other peoples
expectations cannot think for themselves or be motivated enough
to live when life gets rough. Their parents and peer's expectations
are too much for them to handle. In fact, according to government
survey records, the suicide rate of teens in Japan is three time
higher than the US because children are raised from birth to live
up peoples expectations.
After a critical analysis of all the examples, it's a smart
idea for teens to not follow other people's expectations. There
isn't any point of allowing others to get you hurt. Teens must
realize that it's their life and they're old enough to make judicious
decisions for themselves.
"Be Weary of their Expectations"
Do you, as a teenager, think other people's expectations
are the right thing to live up to? If so, you should take the time to
realize that you cannot follow others. Several examples from the
past and present clearly demonstrate how trifling other's ideas
are.
Everyone should realize that they only have one life to
live. For example, a person starts life being incapable of
discerning right from wrong. They grow up learning the
fundamentals of life. During their childhood, they make several
mistakes that they luckily can learn from. But, however, some
they cannot. These involve following others expectations.
Although the expectations of their parents, sometimes, are have
good intentions, the persons peers and those that abhor them try
to micromanage them in the wrong direction. As a result, these
weaken minded people spend their life following others. It's
obvious that they must take a stand for themselves, or they'll
waste their one and only chance at living.
Besides the previous statement, teens should not follow
other people's expectations as they may not be in their best
interest. Chhaya Werner, a junior in high school, is a prime
example of someone who is fully versed in this topic. He states
that ". . . giving in" to someone's expectations ". . . can influence a
person to do something that has more serious consequences."
This doesn't help a person and obviously has no benefits. Instead,
this person gets is confused and cannot make their own decisions
for their welfare.
At last, following others should not happen as it may lead
to death and suicide. After all, a person that follows other peoples
expectations cannot think for themselves or be motivated enough
to live when life gets rough. Their parents and peer's expectations
are too much for them to handle. In fact, according to government
survey records, the suicide rate of teens in Japan is three time
higher than the US because children are raised from birth to live
up peoples expectations.
After a critical analysis of all the examples, it's a smart
idea for teens to not follow other people's expectations. There
isn't any point of allowing others to get you hurt. Teens must
realize that it's their life and they're old enough to make judicious
decisions for themselves.