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"wheat export among three areas in 1985" - ielts exam


lllppp333 1 / 3  
Jul 27, 2011   #1
The line graph compares the difference in wheat export among three areas, Australia,Canada and European countries

As can be seen from the line graph, there was a little distinction in wheat export among three areas in 1985. Firstly, there was a slight decrease in Canada export from about 18 million tons in 1985 to above 16 millino tons in 1986 and sharply went up to25 million tons in 1988. After this the number dropped quickly to less than 15 million tons in 1989. Secondly, European countries export showed a little changes from approximate 17 million tons in 1985 to about 15 million tons in 1988. The gradual rise witnessed by 1988, with more than 20 million in 1990. Thirdly, Australia's export decreased substainally from 15 million tons in 1985 to above 11 million tons in 1990.

Overall, the line graph indicates their change of wheat export between 1985 and 1990.

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Alisha123 9 / 18  
Jul 28, 2011   #2
Overall, the line graph indicates their change of wheat export between 1985 and 1990- you have already mentioned about this line in the begining instead of it you can write about the changing patterns about wheat export in three regions.

also, it looks to mention about peaks and troughs,

gradual change is witnessed...

try to write the information in separate paragraphs.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jul 28, 2011   #3
As can be seen from the line graph, there was a little distinction ---This doesn't sound quite right, as it seemed to vary quite a bit.

...in wheat export among these three areas in 1985.

Firstly , there was a slight decrease in Canadian export from about 18 million tons in 1985 to about 16 million tons in 1986 and then rose sharply to 25 million tons in 1988.

After this, the number dropped quickly to less than 15 million tons in 1989.

Secondly, European countries export showed a little changes from approximately 17 million tons in 1985 to about 15 million tons in 1988.

There was a gradual rise witnessed since 1988, up to more than 20 million in 1990.

Thirdly, Australia's export decreased substantially from 15 million tons in 1985 to about 11 million tons in 1990.

I hope this helps! Good luck in school!

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OP lllppp333 1 / 3  
Jul 28, 2011   #4
Thanks,EF-Susan , i will contiune to review my mistake in my writing
OP lllppp333 1 / 3  
Jul 28, 2011   #5
Alisha123 ,Thanks you give me so much advice, i will make progress under your help


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