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wraithseeker 3 / 8  
Oct 13, 2011   #1
Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place, based on a case of mistaken identity. (GCE 'O' Level)

"Yes!" I exclaimed with excitement as I leapt up with joy. The end of year examinations was now finally over. It was a grueling experience for me as I had sacrificed most of my weekends the past few months staying up late at home to revise. I felt a huge load off my body as I stepped out of the examination hall, gleaming with joy as I walked towards the nearest shopping complex to do some shopping.

I first went towards the department store as I was very eager to purchase some clothes. I brushed past the sea of people as I made my way there. Something suddenly caught my eye. I glanced and stared at that set of clothes taking some time to admire it. I walked up close to the dummy that was wearing the clothes and began to caress it to feel it's texture. It was designed by a famous fashion designer in America who had managed to set worldwide fashion trends. My friends were fanatics of her designs.

"Stop right there!" a booming voice commanded. She took heavy steps and walked furiously towards me as if I had done something wrong to her. I looked around to try and analyze the situation but to no avail. "Why do you still have the cheek to come back here after what u have done?" she questioned me. "I have done nothing wrong so why should I even leave? I protested. She was a lady in her mid thirties and was carrying a branded handbag. She then began to utter a lot of nonsensical words that I could barely make out from my limited understanding of English. However, I could tell that she was cheated out of her money by someone in this department store.

"I want you to pay me back every cent that you cheated out from me and I will also take you to the police station to face the music. Moreover, that incident has also caused me to feel insecure" the lady said firmly. I was beginning to lose my patience and I told her off by telling her that she had no right to accuse me of something that I did not do and that she had taken me for a wrong person. In spite of this, she held firm to her belief and was very stubborn. Vulgarities then began to come into the conversation between us. A crowd soon surrounded us, wondering what the commotion was about.

Blood was boiling in my veins as I began to recall what happened this morning when I took the exam. I left the examination room with a joyful face but it has been reduced to one filled with fury and anger right now. "Peter! What are you doing down here?" a familiar voice spoke. I saw a familiar figure walking towards us with a puzzled expression on her face as she had difficulty understanding the situation. She was an acquaintance of the lady and me. After a moment of silence, I began to explain to her the current situation that I was in and asked for her help to convince the lady. She walked gracefully towards the lady and talked softly to the lady and the lady muttered a few words back in response. By then, the commotion had already died down.

She shook her head a couple of times while talking to my classmate and began to apologize to me profusely soon after. She explained to me that she was cheated of her money by a man who resembled me and had mistaken me for him out of anger. I accepted her apology and we made up with a neutral friendship before I left. I then began to leave the department store along with my classmate towards the exit as we decided to catch a movie instead. Although this was not a good way to start my holidays, I was glad that I had found a companion to accompany me to catch a movie and do some shopping together later.

OP wraithseeker 3 / 8  
Oct 13, 2011   #2
we decided to catch a movie instead.

Since I cannot edit the post any more I will do the adjustment here.

>= we decided to go and catch a movie instead.
EF_Susan - / 2310  
Oct 13, 2011   #3
The end of year examinations were now finally over.

I first went towards the department store, as I was very eager to purchase some clothes.

I glanced and stared at a set of clothes, taking some time to admire it.

My friends were fanatics for her designs.

"Why do you still have the cheek to come back here after what you have done?" she questioned me.

...accuse me of something that I did not do and that she had taken me for the wrong person.

... I was glad that I had found a companion to accompany me to catch a movie and do some shopping together later.---This would be much better if you ended your essay with "...and I was glad that someone came along to save me from this terrible situation.

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