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Some years ago citizens, who lived in the rural area, knew well another people's in the neighborhood



Dipa19 8 / 12  
Aug 29, 2016   #1
In the past most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were advantages and disadvantages of living in small community?

Intoduction
Some years ago many people who lived in the rural area. Where they know each person in their area, but today many people in big cities where they only know a few people. I think that living in the rural have a positive effect such as sense of family will be strong, harmony, and secure. Although it also negative effect such do not know about what is happening outside.

Conclusion
To conclude, living in village that have an advantage such as relation of family would be sturdy, harmonious and peaceful. Besaide that there are also disadvantage such people do not know about what phenomenon that occur beyond their area. I would suggest that people who live in the village enhance harmony among mankind.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Aug 29, 2016   #2
This is the third question that I give valuable feedback in a row :D

Some years ago many people who lived in the rural area.

The idea written is not complete, as you do not write the top level of a sentence containing one subject and one verb.
Simply write this: In the past, more people lived in the rural areas.

Where they know each person in their area

This results in them knowing one another close that those who lived in urban areas.

but today many people in big cities where they only know a few people.

but today, as more people move to urban areas for some reasons, their relationships are not strong anymore because they only know a few of them.

I think that living in the rural [...] know about what is happening outside.

Although some people argue that rural areas made people live in slow pace, I would argue that there would be sturdy, harmonious and peaceful relation of family.

hope this helps :D
a heap of luck


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