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Young adults - early independence or living with family for a long time?



masoud48 1 / -  
Dec 10, 2013   #1
The behavior of young population has always been of great consequence for both the families and the society. Some children prefer to live with their families for a long time. On the other hand, there are those who choose to live independently very soon. Both of these life styles have advantages and disadvantages. As far as I am concerned, the benefits of seeking independence from the family as soon as possible outweigh those of living with family for a long time because of several reasons, among which two reasons are more important. First, children who like to live on their own are able to cope with problems in a more excellent manner. Second, there will be less conflicts between children and parents when they opt for living separately from their parents. Therefore, I subscribe to the idea that living independently is more beneficial compared to living with parents for a long time.

To begin with, in my view, young adults who want to live independently learn how to cope with difficult situation. It is crystal clear that there are always ups and downs in everyone's life. Children who have an inclination toward living on their own tend to have more abilities to solve problems when there may be some difficulties in their life. On the contrary, those who live with their parents for a longer time usually run to their families when facing a problem, thereby resulting in less successful individuals in the future. In addition, psychologists are of the opinion that individuals who live independently will make better parents in the future because they have practiced how to deal with waves of problems when confronting them.

Second, youngsters who live with their families for a shorter time experience less conflicts with their parents. Children who live with their parents for a long time may have some troubles with their parents, for their parents are from a different generation. Not only can this "generation gap" be to the detriment of the quality of living of the family, but also it can cause major problems like prolonged quarrels between parents and children. For instance, a young individual may like to listen to rock music at a loud volume while his or her parents do not approve of it; as a consequence, this may bring about some problems.

To sum it up, with all this taken into account, every individual has to choose between one of these two options. Living with parents for a longer time or to live independently. Even though, living with parents may have some privileges, living with a sense of independence as soon as possible sounds far better to me according to reasons mentioned above. Personally, this is the way of life I am currently living, and I suggest it to everyone.

greenleaf 4 / 20  
Dec 10, 2013   #2
The behavior of young population has always been of great consequence for both the families and the society. Some children prefer to live with their families for a long time. On the other hand, there are those who choose to live independently very soon. Both of these life styles have advantages and disadvantages. As far as I am concerned, the benefits of seeking independence from the family as soon as possible outweigh those of living with family for a long time because of several reasons, among which two reasons are more important. First, children who like to live on their own are able to cope with problems in a more excellent manner. Second, there will be less conflicts between children and parents when they opt for living separately from their parents. Therefore, I subscribe to the idea that living independently is more beneficial compared to living with parents for a long time.

I think it isn't necessary to give reasons right in the Introduction. Just state your opinion in the Introduction, and then give reasons and examples in the Body to make your position clear.

To sum it upTo sum up , with all this taken into account, every individual has to choose between one of these two options: living with parents for a longer time or to live independently . Even though,(no comma) living with parents may have some privileges, living with a sense of independence as soon as possible sounds far better to me according to reasons mentioned above. Personally, this is the way of life I am currently living, and I suggest it to everyone.

Overall, I think this is well written :)
MisterWandering 18 / 314  
Dec 10, 2013   #3
Therefore, I subscribe to the idea that living independently is more beneficial compared to living with parents for a long time.

This sentence is unnecessary as you already mentioned your idea in the introduction.

learn how to cope with

can learn how to cope with

It is crystal clear that

for because their parents are from a different generation

to the detriment

; as a consequence, this may bring about some problems.

Start a new sentence from "As a consequence"

To sum it up, with all this taken into account

Living with parents for a longer time or to live independently.

You can omit this sentence.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 10, 2013   #4
I think it isn't necessary to give reasons right in the Introduction. Just state your opinion in the Introduction, and then give reasons and examples in the Body to make your position clear.

Yes, I too agree with greenleaf. Your topic sounds like an IELTS or TOEFL topic. If you prepare for those exams, this introduction is way too long and won't help you with managing your time at all.


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