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Young people are required to work without pay in their free time to help the local community

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Aug 6, 2023   #1

Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time

There are many benefits to the fact that all young people are required to work without pay in their free time to help the local community. First, it increases accountability in adolescents. They realize they have responsibilities towards the society in which they live. From there, they know how to share and join hands to build their local community better. For example, participate in their local community's campaigns such as improving the environment or improving living standards. Second, working without pay in free time can help young people improve their soft skills. When teenagers are exposed to many people, many problems, they will learn negotiation skills, problem solving skills, teamwork skills and even social communication skills.

we shouldn't require all young people to work unpaid in their free time to help the community for 2 main reasons. Firstly, besides young people who are healthy enough to work for the community, there are also young people with good health who should be cared for and protected. For example, young people with disabilities who are struggling with their own health deserve more love and care than working without pay to help the local community. Second, young people have more important obligations than helping the local community. They need to spend time on their studies to develop their thinking. Besides, they also need time for family, friends and leisure activities, activities that are extremely important for the development of adolescents.
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Aug 16, 2023   #2
This is a comparison essay that is based on the advantages v. disadvantages of the given topic. The overall essay does not follow the required discussion format, nor does it consider the given writing instruction. Additionally, the essay does not meet the 250 minimum word writing requirement. Therefore, the essay will not receive a passing mark. The format of the presentation is inappropriate for a task 2 essay as the paragraphs should be composed of:

Par. 1: Prompt restatement + Writer's opinion
Par. 2: Reasoning 1
Par. 3: Reasoning 2
Par. 4: Summary conclusion

Work on improving these simple observations based on the above information. You should see your simple essay writing style, which is good in terms of discussion by the way, improve in both format and scoring consideration.

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