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Youngsters demanded to do social works in their leisure time in order to help the poor and disabled



vanduc 1 / -  
Sep 27, 2018   #1
SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT ALL TEENAGERS SHOULD BE REQUIRED TO DO UNPAID WORK IN THEIR FREE TIME TO HELP THE LOCAL COMMUNITY. THEY BELIEVE THIS WOULD BENEFIT BOTH THE INDIVIDUAL TEENAGER AND SOCIETY AS A WHOLE.

DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

helping others not mandatory for teens



Many people argue that young people should be demanded to do social works in their leisure time to help the poor and disabled. While I accept that this view, I also believe that students should spend more time to study than taking part in social activities.

On the other hand, I agree that young people should be encouraged to do social activities to help the elderly, the poor or contributing to protect the environment. When they participate in local activities such as cleaning rubbishes or looking after old people in nursing homes; as a result, They would learn some of valuable social skills, for example, communication skills and teamwork skills which would be useful for them to enter the labor market after graduation. Another benefit of helping others is that students have opportunities to apply for scholarships, for instance, some of full scholarships and partial scholarships require candidates' social experience. In terms of the profits for society, the government would reduce a part of the cost of caring for old people or protecting the environment.

At the same time, I do not agree that youngster should be involved in social activities too much. Young people have under a lot of pressure from many subjects on an educational program; therefore, If they didn't have time to refresh themselves, they would be exhausted and suffered from various health problems. Students also need to spend more time to fulfill their courses that is very important to gain a good degree in order to find a well-paid job in the future.

In conclusion, teenagers should focus on their study, and they may be a volunteer in spare times, but In my opinion helping others should not be mandatory for them.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15460  
Sep 28, 2018   #2
Nguyen, you have discussed a totally different topic from the one provided in the original discussion. You have created your own prompt for discussion, which is known as a prompt deviation, which always results in a failing score during the actual test. The prompt deviation can be seen early on in your response presentation. See the comparison below:

Discussion Question: DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?
Response: While I accept that this view, I also believe that students should spend more time to study than taking part in social activities.

The response is either you agree or disagree, not an opinion. You do not respond to the question at all within your discussion because this is supposed to be a single opinion (agree or disagree) discussion essay based on a personal opinion. It is not a "Discuss both points of view and give your opinion" essay. If it were, then that exact key phrase would have been indicated in the prompt instructions. As such, you have not followed the prompt requirements and therefore, cannot be scored in a passing manner for your work.

Do not create your own discussion instructions. Always make sure to follow the instruction provided in the original prompt. If you are not sure that you have followed the prompt of you don't know how to discuss it, ask questions. Don't just write and pray you got it right, that is how you fail the test. You can also read the other Task 2 sample essays here before you continue with your own practice tests. Just so you will be more familiar with the discussion types and how to correctly respond to the instructions or questions provided in the original prompt.


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