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Enjoyable vacation - linking sentences in the first paragraph of the essay



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Jan 24, 2013   #1
What contributes to an enjoyable vacation? The answer probably varies from person to person. As for me, an ideal vacation should make me feel relax, and give me unforgettable memories. To fulfill both the requirements, a good friend to travel with is an indispensable part of a trip.

I feel "To fulfill both the requirements" is far from perfect. How can I link the two sentence more naturally? Please~

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 24, 2013   #2
Guess this is for a speaking task :)

should make me feel relax

should make me feel relaxed

I feel "To fulfill both the requirements" is far from perfect. How can I link the two sentence more naturally? Please~

A good friend can satisfy both these requirements. So, travelling with a friend would certainly make my vacation more enjoyable than doing it on my own.

Hope this helps :)
OP ritared 2 / 5  
Jan 24, 2013   #3
Actually it is the first paragraph of my writing task. Thank you for your advice. It provide me with some new ideas.


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