US NAVAL ACADEMY Personal essay question

OK so i just saw the essay question for the personal essay for the USNA and i am suffering from a terrible case of writers block can anyone shed some light on my dark situations any suggestions or advice this is the question:

1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long range goals, and

2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.

One of the fondest memories I have of my father was seeing him dressed in his navy uniform, the crisp, wrinkle free uniform and his immaculately placed metals of various shapes and colors. I recall having such an admiration for him that I often told him I wanted to be like him when I grew up. While my father was appreciative of the fact that I wanted to pattern myself after him, he always told me to strive for more and not give in to complacency. Oftentimes my father would tell me about the challenges he faced in the navy and how these experiences cultivated his endurance. He also talked about the extraordinary places his naval career had taken him. These stories always captivated me and served to fuel my appetite for a naval career.

Ultimately, I knew that in order to make my dream of becoming a naval officer a reality, I would have to join. I did have some degree of skepticism because I wanted to become a mechanical engineer. But the day I discovered the Naval Academy, my father's sentiments of striving for more fervently resonated in my mind. A military career is something that has always intrigued me because of my father's military service, but the fact that I would be able to pursue my education simultaneously appealed to me even more. Due to the fact that while attending the naval academy I will have an opportunity to earn a Bachelor of Science degree, means that I would be able to fulfill my dreams of practicing engineering and attending the Naval Academy.

Around five years ago I was at a water park in North Carolina in a wave pool. I wasn't a great swimmer but I thought I was tall enough and a good enough swimmer for the wave pool. The waves were bigger and bigger and I didn't realize I was getting closer and closer to the deep end. The water reached my shoulders and before you know it is was at my neck, I was trying to turn around but it was too late. I was under water and all I remember was fighting to reach the top, it felt like life was over. After several minutes I was rescued by the lifeguard, it felt like I was under water for hours. I opened my eyes seeing all my family and friends looking down on me with a look of shock and fear in their yes.

From that day five years ago I started to live my life to the fullest. I realized that all goals, dreams and aspirations should be pursued. At the age of seventeen I have now learned how to swim and I must say I have become a great swimmer at that. I am now able to go snorkeling and deep sea diving. I always wanted to fix cars, and I have accomplished that; this summer I got a summer job working in an auto mechanic shop. Learned how to put in transmissions, change brakes, and install gas tanks. This event in my life has contributed to the way I live my life and I have developed me morally

Thank you, so i started writing started writing it on the train yesterday because thats where the idea came to mind so this is what i have so far:

From a young age seeing my father dress up in his navy uniform I felt nothing but admiration for him and knowing that I want to be like my father when I get older but he would always tell me to become better. Therefore, the day that I found out about the naval academy I knew what I wanted and what my father meant by striving for better.

From a young age seeing my father dress up in his navy uniform I felt nothing but admiration for him and knowing that I want to be like my father when I get older but he would always tell me to become better. Therefore, the day that I found out about the naval academy I knew what I wanted and what my father meant by striving for better.

How about something like this:

One of the fondest memories I have of my father was seeing him dressed in his navy uniform. I recall having such an admiration for him that I often told him I wanted to be like him when I grew up. While my father was appreciative of the fact that I wanted to pattern myself after him, he always told me to strive for more and not give in to complacency. The day I discovered the Naval Academy, was the day my father's sentiments of striving for more fervently resonated in my mind.

So you've begun to express your reasons for pursuing a career in the Navy, continue on to express what intrigues you about it and post it. Hope this is helpful

Yes very helpful i like that i wish i could write like that but english was never my strong point give me a good math problem any day i added something but im not to sure about it to expand it i was thinking of maybe trying to mold the story of the moment i saw my dad and then turn it into the story of how i want to see myself in the same uniform.