I have started my essay and I would like some help finishing it or any advice!
1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long range goals, and
(2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.
My start:
For as long as I can remember I have had the desire to serve my country in the armed forces. My father, being in the Army, has always pushed me twords the Army side of things but I have always
wanted to be one of the best and in my opinion the best is the Navy Seals.
My dad is in the army and i would like to write about how he inspired me to join the armed forces, but my goal is to become a Navy Seal because i enjoy a challenge.
This basically comes down to...
a) answering the questions
b) elaborating on those answers
Short of a chat session, about the best I can do is rephrase the question(s) for you.
1a At what MOMENT did you become interested in the USN?
1b What can you get at the academy that you can't get at ANY other school?
2a Tell about a SPECIFIC event from your life.
2b Describe how that event helped to make you a better person. (We'll deal with the "integrity" part later.)
I know it's much easier for me to say it than it is for you to do it, but that's the basic job.
Don't worry at all about grammar, punctuation, vocabulary, etc. (You'll have to do at least one more draft before editing and proofreading take place.)
For as long as I can remember I have had the desire to serve my country in the armed forces. My father, being in the Army, has always pushed me to the Army side of things but I have always had the mind set to be best and in my opinion the best is the Navy Seals. After visiting the Virginia Military Institute with my father I realized that military based schools are some of the top tier schools in the country. Knowing that I wanted to be a Navy Seal I talked to a senior on my old swim team that applied and got accepted to the Naval Academy. He told me it was by far the best school he visited and the swim team was amazing. I did some research and then talked to my dad about visiting and we planned to visit one day that he was off work. When we first showed up I was already impressed with how beautiful the campus was and after the presentation I was even more impressed.
This is what I have so far, any suggestions?
Naval Academy
(1) Describe what led to your initial interest in the naval service and how
the Naval Academy will help you achieve your long range goals, and
(2) Describe a personal experience you have had which you
feel has contributed to your own character development and integrity.
Main Goal: Seals
1) Initial interest
- Navy Seals
- I loved the campus
- Seemed like a challenge that would be fun to take on
- prestegious school
- I especially like the 'Honor' codes and concepts that are emphasized.
The unique education, "moral, mental, and physical",
made me want to attend an academy versus going
through a [N]ROTC program at another school.
- Not a slack college or a joke college
*- This school would prepair me more than any other school to become what i want to be
2) Personal experience that has changed your own character development and integrity
- Swimming in general
- Dad going on tours when younger
- Switching teams
For as long as I can remember I have had the desire to serve my country in the armed forces. My father, being in the Army, has always pushed me to the Army side of
things. My dad has supported me with every decision I have made in my life, he repeatedly reminds me to not give in to complacency and to strive to be the best and my
opinion of the best is the navy seals. After hearing about the naval academy from a senior at my high school I did some research and took the tour with my dad shortly
after. About half way into the initial hearing I realized that the naval academy was probably my best bet at getting where I want to be in the next 10 years of my
life.
help please!!!
