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Statement of Purpose
These were the words my father always told to me which made my mind incline towards a goal that thrives in achieving perfection in whatever field I choose. Initially in my childhood my ambition was to become a journalist or a news reader. Science and mathematics used to appear to me as drab and unimaginative. But this changed during one of the science workshop I attended in my school, this one small incident change my decision in life. The separation of iron from sulphur by magnetic effect baffled and fascinated me towards science. The workshop showed me the essence of science and significance in the world. I still recollect the great feeling of excitement which ran through me when I made a bulb glow using a dynamo for the first time. Nevertheless to say, I became interested in science particularly electronics and decided to take physics and mathematics as my main subjects in 12th standard.

The exposure and interaction with similar minds hitched my interest toward taking electronics and telecommunication in my under graduation. With ace marks in my engineering entrance exam I choose to pursued my under graduation in Symbiosis Institute of Technology under one of the reputed international university ,Symbiosis International University, Pune.. During my undergraduate program, I have studied many interesting subjects like 'Digital Signal Processing', 'Analog Circuit Desigh, 'electro magnetic and transmission lines', but I always nurtured an interest in 'Embedded Systems Design', and 'Computer Network and Wireless Voice'. My undergraduate institute played a huge role in fostering my interest as well as increasing exposure. I was chosen as the vice chair of SIT-IEEE student branch, which gave me an opportunity to enhance my leadership and organizing skills in the college events. I could make my first electronic project in second year on "electronic dice "realized using a 555 timer ,4017 counter to display a random dice number by the LEDs.To put the knowledge into practical's in 2nd year I was a given a project to develop a 'Quiz' program using data structures and algorithm in C. This was something that I enjoyed the most in college.My interest towards embedded systems and programming led to my choice of project in 3rd year to be 'Automatic Teller Machine (ATM)' implemented based on embedded C.

It was a proud moment for me when I was chosen in the top 10 students out of 120 in our department to undergo training for 3 semesters in Bharath Sanchar Nigam Limited(BSNL) ,Pune, which is one of the top ranking telecommunication industry in India. It was a great opportunity to gain practical knowledge on the computer networking and network security. I successfully finished the three certification course offered by the BSNL under EETP (Employment Enhancement Training Program).

As part of my learning curve in my final year I am currently training at Defense Research and Development Organization (DRDO),Hyderabad for 6 months . In DRDO I work as a project trainee under Advance Numerical Research and Analysis Group (ANURAG). Here,I am working on a project, OFDM (Orthogonal Frequency Division Modulators) Transmitters and Receivers for which I am developing a C as well as matlab code in accordance with DVB (Digital Video Broadcasting) standards. The experience over here opened new horizons for me in terms of professionalism.

Being a staunch believer in academics and co-curricular activities, I have organized various technical events under Proelium Sapientia a tech-fest for E&TC department in Symbiosis for three consecutive years. This experience taught me how to handle people with immense ease and confidence.

I am also passionate about doing my bit for society and an executive member in Society to Create Awareness on Public Safety ( SCAPS) that creates awareness among public on safety preparedness and orderliness. Through this I made a goal of developing some advanced road safety electronic devices and other traffic signaling systems to reduce road accidents and traffics problems. Which is a major problem faced by many countries in the world.

My fascination for the ever growing field of electronics and electrical engineering is my biggest asset and I regard, that by obtaining my Masters Degree at ______________ university [about the university].

Madhumitha, can you be more specific about what masters degree you are applying to? You have presented a tremendous amount of information but you did not really refer to what masters degree course you are applying for admission to. I suggest that you mention that somewhere in your essay just to point the reviewer in the right direction. He needs to know what course he has to consider you for admission to.

As with all other statements, it is important that you do not dwell so much on your childhood interests in science and computers. You should actually avoid discussing that because it does not really relate directly to your current interests as those tend to change during your childhood years. In fact, I believe you pointed this out at the beginning of your essay.

What you can do to make your statement of purpose more effective is revise it. After you identify what your masters degree course will be, you can then present your information related to that field. Give an overview of your college degree and how it helped you get a start in your career. Then, discuss any recent training that you had that helped you further improve your theoretical or practical skills in this yet to be identified field. As a masters degree student, it is an accepted fact that you should be looking towards the enhancement of your current profession and advancement of your career.

Those are the two important topics that you should also discuss in your essay in order to provide the purpose for your desire to be given a student slot in the masters class this coming term. I don't really see those points being covered in your current essay. The information that you currently have in it is best suited for a transfer essay instead of a SOP.

To recap, you have to do the following:
1. Identify the masters course you want to enroll in.
2. Explain why you have an interest in this course.
3. Create a professional outlook for yourself that will further support your desire and need for higher studies.

If you review your current essay, it really does not contain much information that can be considered useful for the reviewer. It can really use a revision.

@vangiespen
Thank you for reviewing it .
My field that want to take up for MS is in embedded systems i.e electronics is my main criteria so i have mentioned regarding it in my projects.

For this where i have to edit the text could you help me out with it?

I already told you in the previous thread that you have to revise the whole essay because the one that you wrote is not applicable as a statement of purpose. What you wrote is more of a general personal statement than anything else. Therefore, it cannot be used in place of a statement of purpose. I guess you did not fully understand what I meant when I asked you to highlight some other parts of your essay in order to create a statement of purpose so let me tell you what you have to do again by paragraph.

Par. 1: Discuss your current profession (if you are employed). What is your current position in this office? How does it relate to your interest in your specified masters degree course of interest (mention the MS course by name) and why you think it is important that you have higher academic learning in the field.

Par. 2: Discuss your college background very briefly. Briefly mention any important awards that you received. Do not discuss it too much. Just mention the award and the reason you won it. Then mention your more recent hands on training, seminars, or conferences that you have attended in relation to your profession. Describe how these events led you to believe that though you have basic training in embedded systems, you need to attend advanced classes in order to bring you up to date with the latest theories and evolved practices in the field.

Par. 3: Explain how you view X university assisting you in achieving your purpose for study. At this point you can mention your specific career plans or academic goals that will have a direct effect on your current profession / employment / position at work. If you have any immediate short term career goals, this would be the point in the essay to mention it.

Par. 4: Reiterate your interest in attending MS studies at this particular university. Discuss the particular courses you want to enroll in and any internship programs that you feel can help you further bolster your learning at the institution. End the statement of purpose.

Again, you have to write a new essay. You cannot use any part of your current essay because the information located within it does not apply to a statement of purpose. I have given you detailed instructions regarding how to write a statement of purpose. Follow the instructions in order to easily develop a new and more applicable essay. I hope I was able to help you.