Here is my S,O,P. please correct my mistakes. thanmks in advance. it is prepared for PhD in mechanica engineering
"Life is not about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself." George Bernard Shaw.
In this essay, I am going to clarify why I have decided to pursue PhD degree in the field of Micro/Nanofluidic and fluid dynamics in the North Carolina State University. My background, inspirations, capabilities and career objectives substantiates my determination.
As a schoolchild at an ordinary elementary school, I noticed that I had a special talent in creating novel methods in solving mathematics and physics problem. Once I remember that my chemistry lab teacher was so surprised by my innovative strategies in processing a chemical reaction, that she asked the principle of the school to award me a prize. Being my talents observed by my teacher, she persuaded me to apply for the best school in my town where the exceptionally talented students were studying. Being admitted there brought me great opportunities along with responsibilities. Studying under supervision of he well-educated teacher, working in the well-equipped laboratory, competing with the best students of my town, all helped me to understand myself, my interests, philosophy of life and my capacity to deal with difficult situations.
Studying at university opened my eyes to new prospects. I could utilize complex mathematical methods in order to perceive physical phenomena. During first two years of my undergraduate study, importance of mathematical modeling for engineers and applied scientists encouraged me to improve my knowledge about computational methods in fluid mechanics. During my undergraduate study, I enrolled in diverse courses and studied the disciplines of fluid dynamic, heat transfer and simulation methods. By taking extra CFD courses, and carrying out programming projects and making use of well-known commercial software during my courses, I achieved an in-depth knowledge concerning the most important computational methods for engineers including FDM, FVM and FEM. Moreover, by doing several numerical projects I became well acquainted with different strategies to articulate common numerical simulation methods into computer programs. Fortunately, I discovered the field of Micro/Nanofluidic, which I found it an integration of all my interests. To choose my way thoughtfully, I discussed my interests with several faculty members, one of whom was Prof. Kamali. He introduced me to some relevant references and leading projects. Having surveyed those materials, I eventually found my way. Now, I know clearly that I am interested in studying and simulating the fluid flow behavior in micro/nanoscale. This has served to sharpen my inclination to engage in active research within this area. Therefore, I tried to simulate the slip flow past a microsphere in a 2D channel, for my B.S project.
It goes without saying that both suitability of graduate program and working under supervision of a superb faculty member who is working on my research interests plays a significant role in achieving my ultimate goal. I want to end by mentioning the fact that diligency, confidence in one's ability and innovation are indispensable in determining one's research and teaching capability. According to my background and objectives, I am certain that I meet these qualifications. Therefore, I request the Graduate Admission Committee to consider me for admission and financial aid.
WOW!! Great opening paragraph!!
...career objectives substantiate my determination.
In paragraph two, you should say what that special talent was!
Your essay is one of the best I've read, strong and certainly not boring.
The last paragraph ends abruptly in the middle of a sentence. Is it not finished yet?
Should the second sentence be exceptionally talented???
Being admitted there brought me great opportunities along with responsibilities. >> or just replace "along" with "and". (If you do that replacement I would replace "me" with "both": brought both great opportunities and responsibilities.)
competing with the best students of my town and trying to outdo each other << this is redundant. this sentence is also kind of long as it is so finding a place to cut back on words would help the flow of it.
By taking extra CFD courses, and carrying out programming projects and making use of well-known commercial software during my courses << the first "and" you should take out
Fortunately, I discovered the field of Micro/Nanofluidic, which I found it an integratedof all of my interests
This has served to sharpened my inclination to engage in active research within this area.
Also, some things to clarify: was this school you worked at labs in also an elementary school?
What is the chronology of the first paragraph? Ordinary elementary school - hard core middle and high school that prepared you for said university?
During the first two years of my undergraduate study, the importance of mathematical modeling for engineers and applied scientists encouraged me to improve my knowledge
I like your opening quote but I had a hard time seeing its relevance to the rest of your statement. How did you create yourself? If you could be more specific about that i think it would strengthen your statement.
I also understand Mech Eng programs might not care as much about such detail. I do think that you have presented your strengths well. Just tighten up some of the English so that it reads more smoothly.
