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My decision to apply for a master's degree of finance and investment stems from my strong ability for numerical analysis. Finance is fundamentally relevant to all that goes on in the modern world, from an independent store to the most famous of multi-national companies. As a Hong Kong resident, I have been fortunate enough to be well placed and have learnt about business in an international finance centre. I am committed to a career of becoming a fund manager in the investment industry and I am interested in the topics covered particularly with portfolio management and dividend decisions during my undergraduate degree at the university. My interest in these areas was further aroused when studying modules such as corporate finance and financial analysis in my final year. Your course not only covers the above topics but will introduce other areas of finance which will broaden and strengthen my knowledge and understanding of the topic as a whole.
Throughout the course, quantitative and econometrics modules help me to understand and confidently interpret numerical information. In addition, I believe my ability to problem solve has been developed by solving many complicated questions throughout the course. Teamwork and communication are vitally important for this course especially when working a group basis coursework. This can allow me to develop as an individual, working towards a collective goal. From the coursework, I have also learnt to analyse and interpret sets of data by applying the knowledge fostered in the financial theories such as capital asset pricing model and discounted cash flow analysis. I find presenting my findings and comparing sets of data is hugely learning. My course also contains essay-based subjects that offer me an excellent opportunity to develop my English writing skills succinctly. Writing essays relating to accounting issues, such as the auditing and governance scandals, has enabled me to develop a more complete business mind. Therefore I would like an opportunity to continue to study in a more challenging environment and also to be able to develop my numerical and financial skills. This invaluable and challenging opportunity will be crucial in my development as an individual and, in turn, help me to prepare more for a life in the financial world.
During the most recent summer holiday, I have been working as a wealth management trainee in an internship programme. My role was to research and understand the structure of the pension funds and the performance of different portfolios with my group members. Such involvement in this programme was invaluable; I learnt how to work within a team and to communicate ideas successfully.
Whilst at the university, I have joined different societies and participated in different kinds of voluntary events such as the Halloween bake sales and the charity week on campus. In addition, being a helper of the travelling society has taught me the importance of establishing priorities and delegating effectively. Throughout the activities that I have been involved, a wide range of skills have developed. These include the development of self-discipline and effective time management which can benefit towards my future career.
I am keen to study at the University of XXX Business School because of your reputation of excellence in business field coupled with the outstanding facilities for graduate students which is a stimulating environment to study at masters level. I believe that my passion for finance and natural affinity with numbers and problem solving makes me an ideal finance and investment candidate. I hope to be well placed to benefit hugely from the course and contribute to the life of the university both within and outside the faculty.
My decision to apply for a master's degree of finance and investment stems from my strong ability for numerical analysis. Finance is fundamentally relevant to all that goes on in the modern world, from an independent store to the most famous of multi-national companies. As a Hong Kong resident, I have been fortunate enough to be well placed and have learnt about business in an international finance centre. I am committed to a career of becoming a fund manager in the investment industry and I am interested in the topics covered particularly with portfolio management and dividend decisions during my undergraduate degree at the university. My interest in these areas was further aroused when studying modules such as corporate finance and financial analysis in my final year. Your course not only covers the above topics but will introduce other areas of finance which will broaden and strengthen my knowledge and understanding of the topic as a whole.
Throughout the course, quantitative and econometrics modules help me to understand and confidently interpret numerical information. In addition, I believe my ability to problem solve has been developed by solving many complicated questions throughout the course. Teamwork and communication are vitally important for this course especially when working a group basis coursework. This can allow me to develop as an individual, working towards a collective goal. From the coursework, I have also learnt to analyse and interpret sets of data by applying the knowledge fostered in the financial theories such as capital asset pricing model and discounted cash flow analysis. I find presenting my findings and comparing sets of data is hugely learning. My course also contains essay-based subjects that offer me an excellent opportunity to develop my English writing skills succinctly. Writing essays relating to accounting issues, such as the auditing and governance scandals, has enabled me to develop a more complete business mind. Therefore I would like an opportunity to continue to study in a more challenging environment and also to be able to develop my numerical and financial skills. This invaluable and challenging opportunity will be crucial in my development as an individual and, in turn, help me to prepare more for a life in the financial world.
During the most recent summer holiday, I have been working as a wealth management trainee in an internship programme. My role was to research and understand the structure of the pension funds and the performance of different portfolios with my group members. Such involvement in this programme was invaluable; I learnt how to work within a team and to communicate ideas successfully.
Whilst at the university, I have joined different societies and participated in different kinds of voluntary events such as the Halloween bake sales and the charity week on campus. In addition, being a helper of the travelling society has taught me the importance of establishing priorities and delegating effectively. Throughout the activities that I have been involved, a wide range of skills have developed. These include the development of self-discipline and effective time management which can benefit towards my future career.
I am keen to study at the University of XXX Business School because of your reputation of excellence in business field coupled with the outstanding facilities for graduate students which is a stimulating environment to study at masters level. I believe that my passion for finance and natural affinity with numbers and problem solving makes me an ideal finance and investment candidate. I hope to be well placed to benefit hugely from the course and contribute to the life of the university both within and outside the faculty.