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'providing emotional and physical care to patients' - PA ESSAY



topher1983 1 / -  
Apr 18, 2012   #1
NEED HELP WITH THIS ROUGH DRAFT FOR THE CASPA ESSAY...ALL COMMENTS APPRECIATED. I REALIZE THERE ARE GRAMMATICAL ERRORS. I'M LOOKING FOR CONTENT SUGGESTIONS AND WHERE IT COULD BE :"TIGHTENED."

Ten different places called home in eighteen years. As a product of a military family, it seemed as if we moved as soon as we finally finished unpacking all of our boxes. Moving on a regular basis opened up the opportunity to experience a variety of people, cultures, and socio-economic stratospheres. The spectrum of experiences that defined by childhood are highlighted from living in the third-world country of Panama to living in a newly organized European Union. One of the most vivid memories I have as a child is that of spending Christmas with the mentally and physically handicapped in the jungles of Panama. The joy and gratitude on the faces of the children by simple acts of charity and altruism is one that cannot be described in words. Such experiences left an indelible mark upon me and instilled altruism, cultural sensitivity, and open-mindedness. Coupled with strong Catholic ties, it seemed natural to pursue religious life.

I became a seminarian for the Diocese of Burlington, Vermont soon after graduating from high school. I was often asked why I wanted to serve the people of Vermont. My answer was simple. To serve those who have no one to serve them. While in the seminary I was able to teach catechesis in several settings, including in a parochial school and a special needs class. It was during my apostolate and service centered events that I found most rewarding while at the seminary. However, man collar I knew that this was not my calling. Though the Priesthood was not my vocation, I still felt called to serve people.

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Spatel 1 / 4  
Apr 18, 2012   #2
Hey, some thoughts..you've got great experiences but hidden by tons of words...
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The spectrum of experiences defined by childhood are highlighted from living in third-world country of Panama and living in a newly One of the most vivid memories I have as a child is that of spending Christmas with the mentally and physically handicapped in the jungles of Panama. The joy and gratitude on the faces of the children by simple acts of charity and altruism is one that cannot be described in words. Such experiences left an indelible mark upon me and instilled altruism, cultural sensitivity, and open-mindedness.
invot 1 / 3  
Apr 18, 2012   #3
I'm trying to tighten this up mostly. Hope it helps.

Ten different places called home in eighteen years.Growing up in a military family, it seemed as if we were back to packing as soon as we finished unpacking . However , moving on a regular basis opened up the opportunity to experience a variety of people, cultures, and socio-economic stratospheres. The spectrum of experiences that defined by childhood are highlighted from living in the third-world country of Panama to living in a newly organized European Union.

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One of the most vivid memories I have as a child is that of spending Christmas with mentally and physically handicapped children in the jungles of Panama. Explain what you did exactly and for how long, etc. The joy and gratitude on the faces of the children by simple acts of charity and altruism is one that cannot be described in wordstry to or remove this statement... if you can't describe it, don't mention it . Such experiences have opened my heart and instilled altruism, cultural sensitivity, and open-mindedness. Can you give an example of this?Coupled with strong Catholic ties, it seemed natural to pursue religious life.

These experiences motivated me to become a seminarian for the Diocese of Burlington, Vermont soon after graduating from high school. Talk more about the process. I was often asked why I wanted to serve the people of Vermont. My answer was simple. To serve those who have no one to serve them. make those all one sentence While in the seminary I was able to teach catechesis in several settings, including a parochial school and a special needs class. What did you learn in Seminary?

Though I consider Seminary the most joyous and rewarding time of my life, I knew that it was not my calling, and my faith was telling me to move forward. That is when I enrolled to become a paramedic. Talk about the process. This ushered in the privilege to work in a profession in which I have the responsibility to provide emotional and physical care to patients in the acute setting . As a paramedic I am often faced with situations which require rapid decisiveness, sound clinical judgment, and empathy towards every patient I encounter. One of the most challenging calls that I have been called for was forFor example, events as traumatic as an eighteenth month old pediatric with burns. When my partner and I arrived on scene, we found a mother in hysterics and a father with his son in his hands running to us. How did you calm them? maybe by calling the hospital...The pediatric had second degree burns with debridement. He had circumferential burns of his right arm, both hands, and partial burns on his anterior and posterior chest. The call was immediately made to head into Children's hospital where he could properly be treated. We ensured the father that his son was in good hands and that he would be receiving the best care. We allowed the mother to sit on the stretcher with her son and comfort him. My partner and I wrapped the child in burn sheets and then I gained IV access in the patient's foot. Then I administered an analgesic to relieve the child some of the pain he was experiencing. We arrived at Children's Hospital with the trauma/burn team waiting our arrival.My partner and I stayed with the mother and her son until her husband arrived. Afterwards, my partner and I debriefed on how the call went. Overall, we felt that even though the call was a challenging one the call went "smoothly." We had communicated efficiently not only with one another, but with the family, other first responders, and medical personnel at the hospital. We had been attentive to the family's concerns and emotions. Finally, we had provided the proper treatment of the patient within the allotted amount of time.Maybe too much detail on one event. Can you think of another example where another good personal quality of yours was allowed to shine?

Now having worked in EMS for several years I am eager to practice medicine with a larger scope to practice within. I am confident in my future as a physician assistant for several reasons. First, I will be able to draw upon the fountain of experiences that have shaped my childhood, adolescence, and early adulthood. Secondly, my Catholic faith has engrained in me a sense of humility and the need to serve those who have no one to care for them. Lastly, the thirst to continue to learn to always to provide the best care that is possible.

Your thesis is only stated at the end of the essay. You should always say it first at the beginning and then again at the end. In general, when writing anything: Tell them what you're going to tell them, then tell them, then tell them what you just told them.

Hope this helps.


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