Hello all, Here is my personal statement with the prompt asking for:
Your reasons for choosing to study at Brunel University London
Your reasons for choosing the course
How this course will contribute towards your chosen future career plans
Any other information you wish us to consider, i.e. relevant experience concerning your intellectual, professional, social, sporting or other interests. (not exceeding 1000 words)
a women in the engineering field
Being born and raised in a third world country I do not have that much opportunity to spend most of my time with modern technological equipment. That makes me to be curious to know more about the technology while I grew up. In addition to this, becoming highly interested on the subjects of mathematics and physics leads me to the study of electrical and computer engineering with the stream of communication and electronics engineering. During the final year of my undergraduate study I had an opportunity to work my project on wireless communication area which had put a cornerstone for my current study, work and future plan. The insight I got at that time was further developed while I was selected to work as a lecturer being the top women scorer on my faculty. Teaching students of electrical and computer engineering course and studying my MSc in communication systems engineering enables me to develop my knowledge with the courses and research. As a lecturer I had an opportunity to attend seminars and conferences which made me realize as I had to study and explore the wireless communication technology further to be successful for my future plan.
The wireless communication systems program at Brunel university London I believe is perfect for me as it offers an in depth analytical study of current practice in wireless systems and provides the perfect mix of theory and practice in all aspects of modern communication systems applicable to today's ever-changing field of wireless communication. I was particularly drawn to this program because of its offering of wireless network technology, network design and management, advanced digital communications and radio and optical communication systems as a core modules given by its distinguished teaching staff of industry and research leading practitioners and faculty academics.
After the completion of the study I would like work on the project to solve the problem that the peoples around my country are facing. This project will work on using the wireless communication system to the medical application which I believe will be a good solution for a country with less professionals and material resources. The project will enable to the wireless follow up of patients far from a specialist doctor and fully equipped hospital by applying a real time wireless health monitoring system which will be successful with the knowledge I had until know and would develop it with the courses, projects and researches available at the university. As a women in engineering field I want to be part of the university's women in engineering program to be able to upgrade my knowledge and skill in order to upgrade myself and help others that are current and future women engineers. These all attributes of the university lead me to conclude Brunel University is the perfect place for me to pursue my postgraduate study in wireless communication system.
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I would be more than happy to take any comments and suggestions.Holt Educational Consultant - / 14,835 
4783 Hiwot, you have a 10000 word maximum on this essay. You have written less than 500 words. The briefness of your statement response tells me that this is not an effective representation of the required discussion. An effective discussion would be at least 750 -800 words long, at a minimum. You have plenty of room to expand all of your discussions and also, to develop more relevant responses in the weak areas of the essay.
Let me be clear, your opening statement is irrelevant. There is no prompt question asking for the current situation of third world studies in this field. Therefore, you are wasting your time presenting that discussion. This essay should instead open with the reason that you chose to study at Brunel University. Believe it or not, you did not respond to that question. No, explaining about the situation of third world education and the lack of equipment does not respond to the question. A proper answer would indicate information based upon research of your chosen course for study and the programs the university offers. That comes in at paragraph 2, but in a minimally developed manner.
Your opening paragraph should indicate something like:
Coming from a country that has limited academic possibilities, I desired to attend higher studies overseas, at a university that has similar course requirements and objectives as my previous university. I came across Brundel university during this search and found a number of similarities between my previous academic background, my current work experience, and my career objectives....
Then a more detailed discussion should progress from there. Your discussion in this aspect will respond to prompts one and two of the aforementioned discussion listing. As for the third part about your future plans. You first have to introduce the fact that you have medical record keeping exposure that has shown you the limitations of this type of method and then you can present your future career projects and goals. You have more than enough word count to accurately respond to the essay prompts. Don't be afraid to use up the full 1000 allowance if you have to. Remember, this is your interview, so make every written statement that you make count towards your consideration for admission.
Coming from a country that has limited academic possibilities, I desired to attend higher studies overseas, at a university that has similar course requirements and objectives as my previous university which lead me to the investigation of many universities. During this search I came across to Brunel University and found a number of similarities between my previous academic background, my current work experience, and my career objectives. It is perfect for me as it offers an in depth analytical study of current practice in wireless systems and provides the perfect mix of theory and practice in all aspects of modern communication systems applicable to today's ever-changing field of wireless communication. Regarding the course contents that particularly drawn to this program because of its offering of courses such as digital communication and DSP which are a very important areas to the understanding of the current digital communication world. Also the courses that are given by the university will enable me to be equipped with the knowledge of wireless network design. The analysis I made during my MSc thesis work on the RF communication enables me to realize as it's a vast area that I am highly interested to further explore and the presence of laboratories that are fully equipped with latest RF equipment were the other factor that made me choose the university. I do believe that for a postgraduate student aside from the courses that are given in the class attending seminars, workshops and conferences is very invaluable not only to develop the knowledge but also to gain an insight for future research works with the ideas that will be raised in there and also the by meeting with different professional which is a possibility that is provided by the university. Upgrading my knowledge with the modules and other resources like the laboratories supported by the workshops and seminars available at the university would enable me to cope up with the challenges I would face and be successful in doing my researched and career paths since I will be supported by its distinguished teaching staff of industry and research leading practitioners and faculty academics which are the main reason on choosing the university.
While I was a fourth year student during my undergraduate study I had an opportunity to spend my time on broadcasting media agency and I had an opportunity to meet with different foreign professional who came from the manufacturing companies of wireless communication equipments whom helped me to understand the wireless communication with the support of equipment and their purposes. This knowledge of mine was further developed while I did with a wireless communication system based project which lead me to the further investigation of the wireless technology.
The introduction of wireless communication had a very great role in making our life easier than it was before. When I think of the applications I sometime image what the business would it be without the existence of a wireless communication. The introduction of smart phones enables to communicate the peoples at any time wherever they are which also was made possible by wireless communication. This communication system is highly applicable for medical, education, entertainment and other areas which makes it to be vital for our lives in everyday basis and I want to be part of this making life easy process which made me to be interested more to the study of wireless communication system. And I am certain to attain what I want with the study of this course at Brunel University.
Also the course modules given and the facilities available will contribute to the success of my future carrier objectives. Three years ago I went to the hospital to visit my uncle who was waiting to have a surgery in a hospital at a very far place from his hometown. His conditions was a bit worsen since he waited for a very long time due to the queue that exists to be checked up by the specialist in order to know the necessity of the surgery. That made me wonder how many of the patients faced such kind of problems and to my surprise I found out lots of patients faced the same challenges even faced death while waiting due to the shortage of the professionals and modern resources available at every nearby hospitals which makes most of the patients to flood to very few hospitals of the county. Then when I try to find a possible technological solutions I found the wireless communication applications on the health sector of other countries of same case. This was another driving force not only for my current study but also to my future career plan on doing a long term project to use real time health monitoring application of wireless communication which will enable the specialist at a far place for the remote fellow up of many patients at a very far place. The study of wireless communication system at Brunel University will enable me to upgrade my theoretical knowledge, practical, and analytical and researching skills to the success of my career plans. This will supported by the knowledges and skills I had developed during my work as a lecturer, the conferences and seminars I attend and the investigations that I made during my BSc and MSc study of the courses, projects and thesis I had done.
