I really would like an honest opinion on this essay. I think I wrote it well, but I know that I need to correct and add more vivid description. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated. Thanks so much!
Topic: How do you think your university studies will affect your career in the future?
When I was in high school, be learning English is my expected of the life, because it will open for my future in higher education, so this thing can make my parents are proud of me from the poor countryside without electric, clean road and six months of floating of the year without doing farm. At that time I thought that only take higher education can change my point of view in my mind with the walls of farm around me.
As you know with my four hours on the class could not enough for me earning knowledge to open the university's gate because I had to help my parents on the farm or cutting grass and keeping duck for other to earn the money for my study on school's chair.
With my hard studying and working from the poor countryside was enough for me to open the small three years college's gate. In the years of college, I was trained with general program in first two years and the last for major of information technology. And the time when I had a chance to travel working in the big city of America and the big view of sciences had been unlocked my eyes, all people who work around me and who I worked with they all are from well know university or academy of the world and then from this seven months of oversee working which makes a change in my mind that how to get the master knowledge to work in my developing country or letting to students who studying from the Universities here or working with my client from Eastern countries? I have to do these things because the higher education of my country is going to the wrong way or bad crisis and then I tried to learning more English and improve myself by self-getting the courses from online resources especially in business English and I also took some open courses about software engineer program from open online resources
Finally, I hope the UAOP will give me a key to unlock my eyes that used to learn poor knowledge from bad crisis education program here and tell to younger people about the modern science and high technology from Eastern countries and especial United States.