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Newcomers Dealing with The New Place


veaenia 3 / 5 7  
Jul 11, 2015   #1
Every places in this world has its own unique culture attracting tourists to visit it, but this cultural difference somehow becomes a big deal for new citizens moving to another region. In the following essay, I will give some sugestions what should the newcomers do to get used to an all new situation.

One of the common problems, even the biggest, is language being the only way in people communicate. It is the first thing that have to be mastered by newbies so that they can survive in their area, afterward they can continue studying other of its habits easily. Sometimes, there are dictionaries avalaible to provide new vocabularies, or the local residents could be asked to teach some sentences generally used.

The special cases, what should be done or even prohibited, must be taken into account by these newcomers. This may seem unimportant and trivial, but this little things certainly would bring conflicts if people don't have any idea about it. After browsing the internet, asking inhabitants is the right way to collect this kind of information.

Annual events is the third thing which is pretty important to be known. People can learn more about the culture from some events, moreover this is the place where people can mingle and know each other.

Thus, people moving to a new area can deal with the way people do things there by following those steps been mentioned before. It is better to have some knowledge before coming from books or internet, but field observation is the most effective way to learn the new culture.
shintacandrade 10 / 74 87  
Jul 11, 2015   #2
Hello Vania,

1. Well, my first suggestion is that you should write the question so that readers enable providing meaningful feedback for your writing.

3. Grammar mistakes
- Every placesplace in this world has
- but this little thingsthing certainly
- Annual events isAnnual events are or The annual event is

4. Spelling issues
- I will give some sugestionssuggestions what should
- Sometimes, there are dictionaries avalaibleavailable to provide

5. Avoid to use contractions in an academic writing. Please write the full words.
- people don'tdo not have any idea about it

Hope this helps. Cheers!
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Jul 11, 2015   #3
I believe that EF welcomes all students with viable insight and sincere advice :)

Newcomers Dealing with The New Place

It is always good to include the complete prompt and write the essay types (TOEFL, IELTS, GRE, etc) so as to be more easily linked with the structure of the essay.

Here is a simple step to deal with an essay:
1. Introductory paragraph
- Building sentences: introduce the topic. Then provide background information regarding the thesis statement
- Thesis statement: present the topic, writer's opinion, and the outline of the essay.

Lets give a try for this;

Newcomers Dealing with The New Place

Almost everyone who studies, lives, and works abroad is faced with matters adjusting to a new culture. It is agreed that the problems of language and cultural barriers can be more difficult even shocking. Therefore, I would argue that personal training on language access and adapting a variety of unique culture are viable solutions to tackle this issue.

As it can be predicted, the following paragraphs will discuss two main ideas;
language training and culture adaptation.

2. Body paragraphs.
When it comes to body paragraphs, your task is to develop the outline in the thesis statement. You need to bear in mind that each paragraph consists of;

- Topic sentence
- Supporting sentences
- Concluding sentence/ a concession statement.

A closer look at model paragraphs below;
It is suggested that people moving to another country should get involved in language training. By doing so, they will learn to listen the phrases coaches use and to talk by imitating what they hear. A 2012 Harvard University study found that 27 Chinese teenagers sent to the US start learning English by combining words in sentences both spoken and written to reach the proportional sizes of common vocabularies in use. The outcome of this study shows that these people could have a well-developed second language equating with the US natives. However, some may argue that the use of translation technology tends to overcome language difficulties more effectively, instead of attending language classes.

Another common drawback of immigrants is to be accustomed to living in the host country. Initially, they are intrigued by all new perspectives of their surroundings. Yet, this honeymoon phase will turn into frustration soon after rejecting the new culture. A brief illustration of this is a number of Indonesian students who study in China feel bored and fatigue, since they are experienced with disruptions of eating rice with chopsticks. This will automatically change their dietary habits. As such, more minorities are supposed to take some action, if something goes unexpected.

3. Concluding paragraph.
As per the rule of academic writing, this last paragraph is divided into three elements;
- Restatement of the thesis statement, with paraphrased words.
- Summary the body paragraphs
- Writer's final thought; recommendations, fears or hopes.

Peruse this paragraph more closely;
The aforementioned evidence reveals that the impact of language and culture diversities is a common challenge for expatriates. Learning vernacular languages not only helps minorities create effective communication. They also need to strive for the process of adaptation. Where possible, immigrants should learn to handle the challenge of everyday life where they live.

To achieve successful writing essays, you need more than one try. Noted !

Hope this helps, eddy suaib.
OP veaenia 3 / 5 7  
Jul 12, 2015   #4
Thanks a lot Ahmad, Shinta, and Mr. Eddy because i found that your advise are very helpful :)
Hopefully afterward, i can make a much better writting


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