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Posts by SeniorMel
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SeniorMel   
Dec 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'My Percussion Playing Experience'&'My Drama Club Experience' Common App Short Answer [6]

My percussion group , which is formed by six performers who are devoted to music, was initiated

It'sIt is not a group merely

I didn't did not

As the Chief principal of percussion group, I trained my crewscrew how to be part

it finally became where I truly belong todo not end the sentence with a preposition .

I like the imagery especially when imagining yourself as traveling through the desert. I also like version one better; your personality shines through.
SeniorMel   
Dec 26, 2011
Undergraduate / 'my capacity for being a kind person' - Brown: the most insight into you [4]

My answer to this question stems maybe use derived or originated from the way I was brought up.

Because of the shoddy politics they faced growing up, my parents werehave always been skeptical of politicians and people in general.

careful and generally skepticaluse a word other than skeptical person.

Only thing I would say is don't use the same word more than once. Otherwise it's a good essay.
SeniorMel   
Dec 26, 2011
Undergraduate / I can't spell accidentally - princeton and harvard supplement [7]

Thank you for any feedback!

To be yourself in a world that is constantly trying to make you something else is the greatest accomplishment.
- Ralph Waldo Emerson, Self-Reliance
My eyes darted out into the sea of parents, searching frantically for my mom. I knew she could not help me. Why did I not receive an easier word like bibulous? "Could you repeat the word?" "Accidentally." As many times I have saw, wrote, said this word, I cannot remember if there is one or two l's.

Three months before, I came home waving a list of words for the class's spelling bee. I desperately wanted to win. Not only would I be recognized as the best speller in sixth grade but also have the chance to compete against seventh and eighth graders. I soon understood spelling is beyond memorizing a bunch of words. I had to know Greek, Latin, Dutch, French, Arabic, German roots, suffixes, prefixes and homonyms. Committing to the spelling bee turned into more work than I expected.

Preparation for the competition began with purchases of Websters Third New International Dictionary and a pronunciation guide. From the spelling list, I created flashcards with the word, definition and pronunciation. The guide suggested learning the etymology and roots of a word. I had no clue what that meant. All of those foreign words intimidated me. But I was not detered; every day I pulled out the flashcards and study. I met a new friend: Merriam Webster's Dictionary Online. Sometimes my mother did not know how to pronunce the words so we used the Internet. Correct articulation of a word leads to greater chances of accurate spelling. I found out there is a format spelling bee participants have to follow. We have the options of requesting the judge to repeat the word, use it in a sentence, give the definition and the etymology.

A week before the class spelling bee, my classmates eagerly tried to figure who seriously was going to study. When I revealed my intentions, I received sideway glances. "Nia, are you actually studying those words? That's a waste of time." In their minds, studying for the spelling bee indicated intelligence which was not the epitome of "coolness." I did not care what they thought. Instead of giving in to peer pressure, I did win the class spelling bee. It was ironic that those classmates who did not learn the words were the most upset at losing. From this, I got the confidence that the right decision was made. Continuing my journey to the regional competition, I won the school's and district wide competition. The words became complicated and I soon realized that spelling bees require extreme dedication and stamina. Dedication to continually delve deeper and deeper into the English language, stamina to spell word after word in the actual contest.

The day of regionals brought on the sensation of boulders rolling through my stomach, down into my intestines. I never felt so nervous. Walking to the stage, I pleadingly looked to the judges table, telepathically sending a message to give me simple words. I advanced through several rounds, defeating each word with ease. At last, two contestants were left, another girl and I. It was a boxing match of words. The stage turned into the ring and I put on my ultimate fighting gloves, reaching into the deep valleys of my brain. I correctly spelled a word, then she did. The inside of my mouth and throat became dry as the Gobi Desert. "Your word is accidentally," said the announcer. "Accidentally."

I traced the word on my arm, tried to recall all the times I had seen accidentally while reading the newspaper. "Could you repeat the word?" "Accidentally." "Accidentally. A-C-C-I-D-E-N-T-A-L-Y." "I'm sorry, accidentally is spelled A-C-C-I-D-E-N-T-A-L-L-Y." I froze, the embarrassment snaked through my body and stunned my brain; I messed up a basic word. At that time, I only cared about winning. It was not until I reflected on those events did the significance of my choice register. Had I conformed to the nature of peer pressure, it would have been a missed opportunity to increase my vocabulary. Being myself in an environment of uniformness led to one of my most memorable accomplishments.
SeniorMel   
Dec 26, 2011
Undergraduate / Iron Chef America, Skydiving, Why Notre Dame? [5]

I would be grateful for some feedback. Thank you!

3. Many people form a list of once-in-a-lifetime activities to accomplish. For example, individuals on the admissions staff hope to visit all the national parks, publish a fiction novel or waddle with penguins in Antarctica. What are a few of the items on your list?

A few items on my once-in-a-lifetime activities to accomplish include visit all fifty states, compete in Iron Chef America and trace my history. I first became interested in traveling to all fifty states while watching television. I would watch the travel shows featuring towns throughout the United States, tasting the flavors of the food at highlighted restaurants or talking to the residents. Visualizing a road trip to some of these places, I was intrigued by the sights each town had to offer. From the Petrified Forest in Arizona, Mammoth Cave in Kentucky, and Harpers Ferry in West Virginia, I want to experience the beauty of my own country. I love food, eating it, discussing it and most importantly, cooking it. I am always testing new recipes and creating my own which is why I would like to compete in Iron Chef America. With sixty minutes to complete five dishes and a secret ingredient, I could surely beat world renonwed chefs. I would like for Henry Louis Gates Jr. to perform genealogy search and find from which part of Africa my ancestors originated. Once I receive the results, my next step is to travel to that region of Africa with my family.

5. Why are you interested in attending the University of Notre Dame?
Why I have chosen to apply to the University of Notre Dame is simple: it is one of the finest institutions to study engineering, my intended major. As a student, I would have access to vast resources and a chance to interact with accomplished professors. From my first visit to campus freshman year of high school, I have been highly impressed by the charming college setting. The attitude of the students who attended Notre Dame piqued my interest, displaying a warm, friendly feeling. One of the best pieces of advice I received from a student was to apply for a research grant during my undergraduate studies. Not only would I be able to direct an engineering study but also travel abroad. Equally important are the various clubs and activities on campus. I like that I can be a member of the Symphony Orchestra even though I am a non-Music majors. Another aspect on my decision to attend Notre Dame is the extensive active alumni association.

I continually imagine myself eating in the delicious food in South Dining Hall again, at a Fighting Irish football game, praying to "Touchdown Jesus" or finally walking up the stairs of the Main Building after graduation. Everything I look for in a college is at Notre Dame and I do not want to miss the opportunity.

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