Writing Feedback / Education about diet is an essential feature of a country's health- care program [5]

Topic: Education about diet is the most essential feature of a country's health- care program" is this justified assumption?

Health care program can be described as increasing health, preventing disease and injury. Thus, it needs to have a nuclear basis which always goes along with people every day. Therefore, I agree with the assumption "education about diet is the most essential feature of a country's health-care program because it always appears in our life day by day, it affects our health, even it changes our style.

In the busy society today, people are no longer taking care of their diet as before. Thus, it's certainly that the quality of meals more and more decreases. Unconsciously, the body of men is impacted badly on many aspects. In addition, as an essential feature in health care program, well-being education about diet can be spread out rapidly thanks to positive senses of participants themselves who will transfer their experience to their friends and relations.

The diet impacts greatly on our health. Substances in meal almost decide the desired amount of nutrient entered human's stomach. For examples, too much vegetable will not supply enough protein to people; it leads to disease of insufficient blood in our body. In addition, as the say that "prevention is better than cure", carefully preparing a meal helps defense against the risks of many diseases such as cancer or heart attack. Therefore, the more knowledge that you get in diet, the less troubles that you encounter in the future.

Education about diet also changes participants' of life style. Actually, once they know how to prepare the meal sensibly, they treat their family with caution instead of drowning in the stressful and busy jobs. They understand that what they do will influence other persons' health in family. In turn, all members can close to each other gradually thanks to great meals day by day. As the results, education about diet brings happy to lots of families.

In short, putting education about diet as important aspect in health care program is right action. People not only are increased their health but also can change their life style in this busy world.

Writing Feedback / Should we trust someone in the first impression or not? [NEW]

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Some people trust their first impressions about a person's character because they believe their judgments are generally correct. Other people do not judge person's character quickly because they believe first impressions are often wrong. Compare these two attitudes. Which attitude do you agree with?

Some people think that their evaluation in first impression about stranger is right. Other people, however, argue that, that evaluation is wrong. To me, I prefer the former to the older that we should not trust a stranger based on the first time meeting.

Why do the people trust other in the earliest stage? For one thing, they believe their intuitions. They believe that those feeling help them don't waste time to understand a person. HR staffs are one example. If they shake hand an employee, they would know his attitude toward his job. If they make conversation with a job's candidate, they will get partly candidate's personality. Besides, when people trust other, they can share anything without reluctance. Therefore, they can easily make more friends and expand their relationship.

Although I agree that there maybe one or two advantages for trusting people in the first time meeting, for all intent and purposes, I think we should not hope to get those advantages in the first time meeting. In the first place, not all people have the same art criticism as the HR members who interact with many different people just in a day. Most people usually communicate with most people around them. In addition, when people put their trust in the first impression, they could lose many good friends. People say, "A friend in need is a friend in deed", so only getting along with the time, we would be having good friends.

In the second place, people will give consideration for the stranger in the friendship days. If a girl thinks deliberately to choose a boy as her boyfriend, she might be not broken her heart because that boy is not suitable with her. If a person examines stranger in the initial stage, he may not regret because that good friend actually is a bad guide.

In conclusion, trusting people's character in the first impression could make more disadvantages than advantages. People are not the artist in distinguishing many different people and they need more time to get to know those strangers deliberately. They should be based on their mind, not based on intuition.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL: Going in vacation or buying a car?? [4]

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Topic 177: A friend of yours has received some money and plans use all of it either to go on vacation or to buy a car. Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend's choices and explain one you think your friend should choose.

Go on vacation
There is much discussion above that "should my friend buy the car?" Buying the car is one way to spend that much money, however, from my point of view; my friend should use money on going on vacation.

A car could bring some benefits to its owner. It takes you to work every morning and carries his family to go anywhere instead of renting others one with high cost rental or transports sundry items to home. Besides, a car, in my country is the symbol of luxury. It means that my friend's society rise. As the result, he may get much more respectable than he is now.

Although I agree, there are two or more advantages for my friend to buy a car. However, I insist that the advantages of shopping overweigh him. Not only gas cost increasing but also expensive maintenance fees are the serious problems that influence his family's finance. He should examine these things before he gives his decide whether he buys a car or not. If my friend spent much money on going on vacation, he would discover many interesting things out there but his home and his office. He also relaxes after tired works and enjoys many kinds of entertainments or lives under the natural life.

The vacation is the change for my friend to accumulate new things. He would get many experiences from this trip such as learning new things and getting more skills in his life. Moreover, he would make more friends after the travel and expand his relationship.

In conclusion, my advice is that my friend should spend much money on going on vacation because it gives him more benefits than his other choice. Going on vacation is more sensible than buying a car.

Writing Feedback / TOEFL -Computers have made it possible for office workers to do their work [6]

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Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do
their work from home instead of working in offices every day. Working
from home should be encouraged for workers and employees as it is
good. Do you agree or dis?
Some people think that working at home brings to workers and employees too much convenience, but i don't. Because the best conditions are sometimes not likely to be good as the expectation of people. Working without pressure and interaction are some examples for these disadvantages.

Pressure is motivation. Each office has its rules that keep workers do their job as effectively as possible. The directors manage employers and give them the deadline of projects. Then again, the workers must try their best to finish the time limit. Doing all jobs at home don't make employees attempt to work like this.

Computers and modems bring works to home but these still have many things distract their mind. Facebook or Yahoo have been the entertaining websites, however, they are the reasons why people cannot concentrate on their job. The dos and don't at office play important role to prevent these things from workers. In condition, doing all jobs alone makes employees fall asleep easily. As a result, the project cannot being done. The best condition might not be good for people.

Interaction has been an advantage for workers at offices. Discussing and debating Projects together increase working ability because all we know that the target can be reached fast thanks to working of many people. Besides, interaction help employees improve their communicational skills, therefore, they will have more and more friends and relationships. Interaction is a factor increasing working quality.

There will have many disadvantages if the workers work at home. Mitigating process, no interaction and pressure are these things people should examine when they want to work at home.