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'I remember my past' - A personal statement- Accomplishment [4]
Sanjaygir, this sounds like a great story and the overall organization and progression seems to unfold and flow quite nicely. There are some individual grammatical errors and some sentences that may be error free but still sound a bit awkward when read outloud. For instance:
"The boarding school, I was admitted to, had students majority of whose parents were either not in the valley or abroad for some reasons. This fact made these students worry less about anything. Humiliating each other, playing pranks, causing troubles and ignoring disciplines seemed like a daily routine of these students."
I would change to:
"The boarding school I was admitted to had a majority of students whose parents were either not in the valley or abroad for some reason. This made these students uncaring for anything. Humiliating each other, playing pranks, causing trouble and ignoring discipline seemed to be a daily routine for these students."
In some ways this revision still sounds a bit awkward to me but it is still a bit better.
Also, watch you plurals. Pay close attention to when they are needed and when they are not. For instance:
"Situations began to improve after I entered this section."
----I would change to----
"The situation began to improve after I entered this section."
or
"My situation began to improve after I entered this section."
----Also----
"Computer was always a passion for me but I hadn't got any opportunities in my past days to hone my skills in using it."
----I would change to----
"Computers had always been a passion for me but I had not had any previous opportunities to hone my skills using them."
I'm sure there are many other things that the moderators can help you with but this should get you started. I believe your ideas are good and if you just clean up the way they are presented you will have a great piece of writing here. Good luck!