Writing Feedback / Some schools, plummeted in quantities of pupils [4]

Writing Task 1

The table depicts the percentage of students attending four various of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. Overall, it can be seen that the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools plummeted in quantities of pupils, while the community schools became the biggest percentage of secondary school attendance during the same period.

Between 2000 and 2009, the proportion of pupils in voluntary-controlled schools experienced drop from over half to one in five. Similarly, the number of children in grammar schools only bellow one quarter declined by half at the same period. Whereas for the specialist schools, the rate of students attending was relatively small this type of school at 12% also decreased but not significantly at 10%.

In contrast, while the other three various of school dropped in the survey, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, only a few number of pupils at 12% were educated by 2000. Moreover, the figure significantly rose over half of all students by 2009.

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Writing Feedback / Spendings number for various goods in some part of the world [3]

Expenditures in Japan and Malaysia

The pie chart compares the proportion of household spending in Japan and Malaysia during 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the smallest percentage of both countries in the health care.

Looking at the figure, the most popular expenditure in Malaysia was housing, witnessing nearly more than a third of all spending, but it was the third popular in Japan at 21%. At 26%, other goods and services was the third position of spending in Malaysia, while it was most popular in Japan at less than a third. Interestingly, both of two countries occupied the second position of spending on food at the period given.

In the remaining figure, household spending on transport in Malaysia and Japan was in the fourth proportion rate, but a domination was shown by Japan with more than double. Again, this also occurs in health care category with both of two countries was the last rate, but Malaysia spending a half lower than Japanese did.

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Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 opinion's people about internet using [4]

internet in the view on an average citizen

People have different views about the internet is a good means of connecting people. Others believe that it may not a best place to search information. This essay will discuss both of this view and give my opinion.

On the recent years, internet is very useful for everyone start from children to old people. First of all, internet can connect people in different distance around the world. For example, some people have a long distance married with their husband from Indonesia to Australia, they also can establish a warm communication by video call, email and other social medias. Secondly, internet give some people communication with their boss easily, it can replace the direct meeting and presenting with their boss. Thirdly, internet also find old friends, if some people difficult to meet their lovely friend in senior high school, internet can connect them easily without spend much money and time, because they can chat in everywhere.

In contrast, there are many reasons why internet is not the cozy place to find information. Firstly, many information in internet hoax and give some opinions to hate specific person. For example, on the recent month, there are many pictures about Mr.Ahok with some sentences that he did impolite for Al-Qur'an and then many people as a Muslim angry with this view. Secondly, many information in internet did not have a trusted source. Thirdly, information or news in the internet contain "SARA" and not good for young generations.

In conclusion, I can understand why people suggest that internet is not a best place to find information, it seems to me that internet is danger for young people when they find a wrong information.