Undergraduate / Stanford Intellectual vitality- Watching teletubbies [3]

This is a draft of my stanford essay. It's still incomplete and full of mistakes. But can someone tell me how's the idea and how is it overall?

Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development.

The giggling baby sun slowly rose over Teletubbyland. The catchy theme song began: "Tinky-Winky, Dipsy, Laa-Laa Pooooooo!!!"
Every day at 7 AM sharp, the eyes of a 2-years old me gazed at the retro CRT television in my parents' bedroom, awaiting for daily new episodes of the Teletubbies. For so many years, I was immersed in its fantasy world full of gorgeous flowers, cuddly rabbits, warm hugs and bumping tummies, that even before going to sleep, I would cover my head with a thick blanket, fearing that the Scary Lion would capture and eat me. The cartoon-ish show, which depict the story of four big-eyed creatures with television screens on their tummies, and swinging antennas on their heads, has been especially crucial in sparking my curiosity. If something appeared from "Over the Hills and Far Away", the Teletubbies would ask "What's that?" Watching my four big-headed and round-bodied friends questioning everything around them, soon, at sight of every unidentified or suspicious object I encounter in real life, I begun questioning everything, from my mother's brand new comb to the broken handled ladle in my grandma's kitchen. By exploring Teletubbyland, I discovered all the answers in the real world.

Rather than being a mere toddler TV show, the Teletubbies is thought- provoking one, allowing me to travel throughout the whole world from my bed, by watching from Tummy TV the Brazilian Carnival or children with colors during the Holi Festival in India; giving me the opportunity to express myself through dancing, singing, hugging and intellectually-stimulating activities like Cow-Milking, Custoast-making, which have over the years nurtured my imagination, and my enjoyment of life. Like Tinky-Winky, Dipsy, Laa-Laa and Po, let's allow our boundless imagination and curiosity to soar, let's question everything around us to obtain answers, and let's hug each other every time an opportunity shows up. The world, would have surely been a much better place if we had lived like the Teletubbies.

Undergraduate / I had to overcome my greatest fear. I blacked out in front of forty-six delegates. MIT SUPPLEMENTAL [5]

Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did You manage the situation? (200-250 words)

My energy levels began plummeting, my vision started to blur and my eyes slowly closed themselves.

Seconds later, I woke up in the arms of the security officer. Despite having spent weeks doing all my research, I blacked out in front of forty-six other delegates in the Food Security Commission at regional MUN. Within hours, the news had spread throughout the whole school, and some of my friends even nicknamed me" The Fainter". Against my expectations, the horrible humiliation I faced that day did not push me to quit public speaking. Instead, I was, more than ever motivated, and I was bound to overcome my fear of public speaking.

The upcoming winter holidays, I joined the Toastmasters Speaking club. For more than one months, through a series of prepared and impromptu speeches, coupled with the unbridled guidance of the Club coaches, I absorbed several techniques, as I gradually learned how to use brainstorming to guide my direction, vary my focal tone, facial expression, stance and body language to keep the audience focused. I spent day and night practicing, while reviewing videos of my previous speeches. Day by day, my oratory skills starkly improved, and I gained even more confidence in myself.

The day of the nationals finally came. After three grueling days of intense public speaking and debating, the proclamation of Delegate of Sweden as Best Delegate of the Food Security Commission, filled up my eyes with tears.

I had overcome my greatest fear.

Undergraduate / Something you do for pleasure of it MIT-dancing [6]

I never really figured out when I started to enjoy dancing, until I was invited at my cousin's marriage.
The bass-boosted EDM rumbled across the hall, yet, no one dared to step on the dance floor. I glimpsed around me. The temptation was so irresistible, that my legs and my arms begun to wobble to the tunes of Tiesto. Jumping from my chair with a perfectly executed Cartwheel, I landed right in the middle of the dance floor and begun waving my hands and shuffling my legs. With my mind and body working in synchrony, I could feel the adrenaline gushing through my veins and all my body muscles stretching all the way through. Since, whenever I hear music, be it at birthday and marriage parties or in the bathroom, I cannot help myself dance.